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Marold Posted 14 years ago
Grammar

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"I regard myself proficient owing to my spent hours in pursuit of an improvement in an accuracy and effectiveness of my work."

Is this sentence correct?

Thanks in advance.
  

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Marold "..... " 1) You believe that you improved, so you don't need "in pursuit of". 2) 'the hours' is more natural than 'my hours'.

— Canadian45

  • Marold ".....
  • " 1) You believe that you improved, so you don't need "in pursuit of".
  • 2) 'the hours' is more natural than 'my hours'.
  • 3) Put a comma after "proficient".
  • 4) Do you mean "effectiveness" or 'efficiency'?
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Marold".....
"I consider myself proficient, owing to (the)(my) hours spent improving the accuracy and effectiveness of my work."
1) You believe that you improved, so you don't need "in pursuit of".
2) 'the hours' is more natural than 'my hours'.
3) Put a comma after "proficient".
4) Do you
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Well, I think the intended meaning inclines more to the second option, or at least, I aimed at forming the sentence that way.

Would it be alright to write efficiency in order to mean "to make the work I do more effective, accurate, less time-consuming"?

Otherwise thanks for you suggestions and corrections.
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MaroldWould it be alright to write efficiency in order to mean "to make the work I do more effective, accurate, less time-consuming"?
"efficiency" certainly includes the accuracy and speed of the work.. "effectiveness" can be different. It can include achieving a desired result after the work is done.
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canadian45a desired result after the work is done
This makes sense! Thanks a lot.Emotion: wink
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