On the celebrity spokesperson

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On the celebrity spokesperson Currently, we could hardly live a single day without seeing a celebrity spokesperson promoting a product or social campaign on TV, net or other media. This is an intensely popular trend. There is no doubt that the celebrity sportsperson could boost the sale of a product.A host of celebrity spokespersons, however, have emerged as the marketing tool of companies, even companies producing and selling fake and inferior items. This kind of behavior has produced negative impacts on consumers and whole society, which should be severely criticized and penalized.This kind of behavior has produced negative impacts on consumers and whole society, which should be severely criticized and penalized of course, as is known to all, everything has both bright and dark sides.Some star’s endorsement of social activities and public campaigns raises public awareness, giving rise to dangers in public.To name only one case Pu, a household figure, acting as the celebrity spokesmen of the China AIDS foundation, contributes greatly to the cause of AIDS prevention and cure in China.

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On the celebrity spokesperson
~~Currently~~ suggest Nowadays or similar , we one ~~could~~ can hardly live a single day without seeing a celebrity spokesperson promoting a product or social campaign good on TV, ~~net~~ the internet or other media.
This is an intensely do you mean increasingly? popular trend. There is no doubt that ~~the~~ using a celebrity sportsperson ~~could~~ can boost the sale of a product.
The yellow highlighted bits don't sound quite right but I'm not sure how to improve them.

A host of celebrity spokespersons, however, have emerged as the marketing tool of companies, even companies producing and selling fake and inferior items. Good. This ~~kind of~~ unnecessary ~~behavior~~ unnecessary has ~~produced~~ had a negative ~~impacts~~ impact on consumers and the whole of society, ~~which~~ and suggest in my opinion should be severely criticized and penalized.
Good. Very important: when you wrote "... society, which should be severely criticized and penalized", the WHICH refers to the most recent idea or noun in the sentence, which is SOCIETY, not the bad behavior of these companies. I've changed WHICH to AND, which groups "should be severely criticized and penalized" with "has had a negative impact ...".

~~This kind of behavior has produced negative impacts on consumers and whole society, which should be severely criticized and penalized~~ that repeats the last part ~~of course, as is known to all, everything has both bright and dark sides.~~ poorly worded and in my opinion unnecessary and weak. I suggest deleting this part completely.

Some ~~star’s~~ stars' endorsement of social activities and public campaigns raises public awareness, giving rise to dangers in public. I have no idea what you're trying to say there.
To name only one case, (comma) Pu, a household figure, acting as the celebrity spokesmen of the China AIDS capital here fFoundation, contributes greatly to the cause of AIDS prevention and cure in China. Good

With the last paragraph, the change from "some celebrity spokesperson endorsement should be criticized and penalized" to an example of a celebrity spokesperson who is doing good things, is quite abrupt. I was expecting you to continue by explaining more about these "bad" celebrity spokespersons could be identified and penalized. I suggest you add "However, most celebrity spokespersons have positive effects on society" or something like that, at the end of the paragraph where you criticize them, to "reset" the tone of the article before you go on to praise Pu.

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