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Contiluo Posted 15 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
On the alert
Is the following sentence acceptable ?
She was not on the alert that a bad guy with a mask traced her stealthily.
She was not on the alert that a bad guy with a mask traced her stealthily.
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The grammar does not work. Here are two options: She was not on the alert for a bad guy in a mask who was tracking her stealthily. She was not aware that a bad guy in a mask was tracking her stealthily.
- The grammar does not work.
- Here are two options: She was not on the alert for a bad guy in a mask who was tracking her stealthily.
- She was not aware that a bad guy in a mask was tracking her stealthily.
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The grammar does not work. Here are two options:
She was not on the alert for a bad guy in a mask who was tracking her stealthily.
She was not aware that a bad guy in a mask was tracking her stealthily.
She was not on the alert for a bad guy in a mask who was tracking her stealthily.
She was not aware that a bad guy in a mask was tracking her stealthily.
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1. "on the alert" doesn't sound correct. "She was not aware/alerted" is better.
2. "traced" is not a good choice of word, and I think the sentence sounds better if you use past continuous tense. I think "...a bad guy with a mask was stalking her..." sounds much better.
3. "stealthily", though not wrong, sounds incongruous.
2. "traced" is not a good choice of word, and I think the sentence sounds better if you use past continuous tense. I think "...a bad guy with a mask was stalking her..." sounds much better.
3. "stealthily", though not wrong, sounds incongruous.
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