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Gillyflower Posted 10 years ago
Grammar

omission of a part of sentence

context: "In a study on 1554 emergency medicine residents, in response to the question if they had a traffic accident in their way home after work, 76 (%8) reported that they had been involved in 96 traffic accidents, and 553 (%58) reported that they had been involved in 1446 near accident."

If I omit "that they had been involved" as follow, would it communicate the exact meaning"?

"In a study on 1554 emergency medicine residents, in response to the question if they had a traffic accident in their way home after work, 76 (%8) reported 96 traffic accidents, and 553 (%58) reported 1446 near accident."
  

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The overall structure is poor and overly long.

In a study of 1554 emergency medicine residents, 76 (8%) reported 96 traffic accidents on their way home after work, while 553 (58%) reported 1446 near-accidents."
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Mister MicawberIn a study of 1554 emergency medicine residents
Isn't it correct to say "in a study on 1554 people"?
Which one of the prepositions should be used, for example, in this sentence: "The result of a study of/on? residents showed that lack of sleep impairs alertness and concentration and leads to increased medical errors, which is in line
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gillyflowerIsn't it correct to say "in a study on 1554 people"?
'On' is not a good choice anyway, but if anything, your study is on sleep deprivation.

Your more serious problem is efficient composition, however. Your sentence should read:

The results of our study of residents show that lack of sleep impairs alertness and concentration and
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Mister Micawber(By the way, did you really need to conduct a study to realize these facts?)
I want to report the results of another study; this is why I've written "The results of a study" [the researcher of the study is not important here]. Doesn't it work ?
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gillyflowerI want to report the results of another study
Oh, I see.
gillyflower this is why I've written "The results of a study"
Then use 'a' (or better, 'one'), not 'our'.
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553 is not 58% of 1554.
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