Nowadays technology

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In recent years there has been a growing trend of companies/ government using our daily used technology to track our activities and whereabouts. I strongly reckon that this trend has both benefits and drawbacks which effecting on people’s life.

On the one hand, I consider that using those security devices has some distinctive benefits, one of them is that governments use advanced technology such as security camera as a protective tool for society. Having those installed in the streets, stores or even in civilian homes will ensure their safety as well as belongings. For example, when someone’s home has been broken in by burglars, the installed cameras will record clue about the thief's’ identity, which helps the police to find out the culprits and retreat the stolen property as fast as possible. Another benefit is that parents can apply mobile tracking to their children’s phones in order to protect beloved ones, alerting them when there are unusual behaviour, it can also become a vital role in helping the rescue team when people getting lost or kidnaped.

On the other hand, I would argue that being monitored can affect people lives in serious ways . Firstly, I believe that none of us would feel comfortable if we know our every activities is being watched. By keeping track of every words we said or typed, our privacy is destroyed; people value their secrets, things that only meant to share between friends or close family members is not for public eyes. Secondly, monitoring while people are unconscious or without their consent is an unlawful action. People who are tracking phones of others must be put behind bars as a punishment and consequence due to their criminal act. For instance, there are an increasing numbers of hackers earning money by selling private/sensitive information and personal schedule for demanders, they must be tracked down and imprisoned.

In conclusion, although of course there are some disadvantages in this new approach, I believe that those technology will help authorities manage community more effectively at present.

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Nhi Ha · Accepted Answer

In recent years there has been a growing trend of companies/ government using our daily used technology to track our activities and whereabouts. I strongly reckon that this trend has both benefits and drawbacks which effecting on people’s life.

On the one hand, I consider that using those security devices has some distinctive benefits, one of them is that governments use advanced t

On the one hand, I consider that using those security devices has some distinctive benefits, one of them is that governments use advanced technology such as security camera as a protective tool for society. Having those installed in the streets, stores or even in civilian homes will ensure their safety as well as belongings. For example, when someone’s home has been broken in by burglars, the installed cameras will record clue about the thief's’ identity, which helps the police to find out the culprits and retreat the stolen property as fast as possible. Another benefit is that parents can apply mobile tracking to their children’s phones in order to protect beloved ones, alerting them when there are unusual behaviour, it can also become a vital role in helping the rescue team when people getting lost or kidnaped.

On the other hand, I would argue that being monitored can affect people lives in serious ways . Firstly, I believe that none of us would feel comfortable if we know our every activities is being watched. By keeping track of every words we said or typed, our privacy is destroyed; people value their secrets, things that only meant to share between friends or close family members is not for public eyes. Secondly, monitoring while people are unconscious or without their consent is an unlawful action. People who are tracking phones of others must be put behind bars as a punishment and consequence due to their criminal act. For instance, there are an increasing numbers of hackers earning money by selling private/sensitive information and personal schedule for demanders, they must be tracked down and imprisoned.

In conclusion, although of course there are some disadvantages in this new approach, I believe that those technology will help authorities manage community more effectively at present.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

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In recent years there has been a growing trend of companies/ government using our daily used technology to track our activities and whereabouts. I strongly reckon that this trend has both benefits and drawbacks which effecting on people’s life.

On the one hand, I consider that using those security devices has some distinctive benefits, one of them is that governments use advanced t

On the one hand, I consider that using those security devices has some distinctive benefits, one of them is that governments use advanced technology such as security camera (All the governments use the same camera?) as a protective tool for society. Having those installed in the streets, stores or even in civilian homes will ensure their safety as well as belongings. For example, when someone’s home has been broken in by burglars, the installed cameras will record clue about the thief's’ identity, which helps the police to find out the culprits and retreat the stolen property as fast as possible. Another benefit is that parents can apply mobile tracking to their children’s phones in order to protect them ~~beloved ones~~, alerting them when there are unusual behaviour, it can also become a vital role in helping the rescue team when people getting lost or kidnaped.

On the other hand, I would argue that being monitored can affect people lives in serious ways . First, I believe that none of us would feel comfortable if we know our every activities is being watched. By keeping track of every words we said or typed, our privacy is destroyed; people value their secrets, things that only meant to share between friends or close family members is not for public eyes. Second, monitoring people while they are unconscious or without their consent is an unlawful action. People who are tracking phones of others must be put behind bars as a punishment and consequence due to their criminal act. For instance, there are an increasing numbers of hackers earning money by selling private/sensitive information and personal schedule for demanders, they must be tracked down and imprisoned.

In conclusion, although of course there are some disadvantages in this new approach, I believe that those technology will help authorities manage (missing word) community more effectively at present.

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