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Anonymous Posted 15 years ago
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Nottingham university application letter

Hello,

my name is Meriem I'm from Tunisia. I currently study electrical engineering and I will graduate by June next year . I'd like to go on with a management master degree so I'm going to apply to many programs, starting by the Nottingham university program. This is the first time I have to write such a letter. Could you correct me my letter? Thank you.

Dear Nottingham Committee:



I am pleased to be applying to the Nottingham University, International Business Program.

The five years of my engineering training focused on solving problems and on enhancing creativity. But I was not equipped with the managerial tools that are fundamental to evolve in the Business world and to become one of tomorrow’s key leaders. The International Business program would provide a large step towards reaching that goal.

There are many competitive programs but Nottingham’s International Business program is the one that appeals to me most for various reasons.



Firstly, Nottingham University is highly prestigious and its International Business Master is ranked among the top global Masters in Management. From all the testimonies I have read, it is clear that this Master program would open me the doors to the thriving world of Business, working in well-renowned companies and enabling me to launch a successful international career. Secondly, Nottingham’s International Business program, unlike other programs, is dedicated to students like me who have no management or business background. I would thus be sure to gain a high level training with the theory and practice I would need to get into the Business world. Further, Nottingham’s International Business program promotes students mobility, as they could spend an entire semester in China, learning about the Chinese market’s evolution while at the same time experiencing life in China. Being profoundly attracted to the Chinese culture and language, this would provide me with a unique human experience along with an incredible opportunity to learn firsthand about the Business in one of the leaders of the global economy. Finally, this program brings together participants from all over the world, so I would be in contact with diverse cultures and I would also develop an international network.



While applying for this program and for a scholarship, I perfectly realize that the competition is tough. I feel, however, that I have many strengths that make me eligible for the program. My first quality is my ability to work in group, as attested by my final year's project (PFA) which involved working in collaboration with others. This is also a quality I benefit from in my work with a local group ATCC that is fighting cancer. That said, as part of my activities in ATCC, I tour primary schools to raise awareness among youngsters regarding the dangers of smoking. This experience helped me develop my organizational skills as I am responsible of the establishment of the anti-smoking program. It also offered me the opportunity to practice public speaking which is a fundamental component of my work. Moreover, the fact that I speak many languages fluently (Arabic, French, English, Spanish) and my curiosity about different cultures in the world would foster my integration in a multicultural environment.



I look forward to hearing from you and if you require any further information please do not hesitate to contact me.





Sincerely,

Meriem Ben Abdallah
  

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Hello, I am a tunisian student with an electrical engineering background. This is the first time I have to write such a letter so I would need some help to improve my first draft. Thank you.

  • Hello, I am a tunisian student with an electrical engineering background.
  • This is the first time I have to write such a letter so I would need some help to improve my first draft.
  • Thank you.
  • Dear Nottingham Committee: I am pleased to be applying to the Nottingham University, International Business Program.
  • The five years of my engineering training focused on solving problems and on enhancing creativity.
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Hello,

I am a tunisian student with an electrical engineering background. After I graduate next year, I would like to pursue a Management Master so I'm going to apply for many programs among which the Nottingham University Program.This is the first time I have to write such a letter so I would need some help to improve my first draft. Thank you.

Dear Nottingham Committee:
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Meriem, please see this following link:



Your letter is vague and somewhat chaotic, which is typical for many people writing their first letter.

Vague: "There are many competitive programs but Nottingham’s International Business program is the one that appeals to me most for various reasons. "

When I put that sentence through my interpretation machine, it says,
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>> Everything you discuss something, discuss something specific.

Oops...

Every time you discuss something, discuss something specific.
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I think your draft is good. Grammatically you do not make a lot of errors, though I am quite concerned that you 'was not equipped with the manegerial tools' - which means you are equipped with it right now, is going to convince them into accepting you into the university. Overall it's superb.
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Hi,

thanks for your response. I have made some major changes ever since. Here is my new cover letter:

Dear Nottingham Committee:



I am currently a third year student of undergraduate studies in Electrical Engineering at the National Engineering School of Tunis and I am pleased to apply to the Nottingham University "MSc International Business Programme" for the
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You have two active, live versions of your letter.

There's one above. And then you have one here:



Since you are receiving help here, I will no longer assist. You should, in the future, chose only one spot to create your post. Double posting is confusing.
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I am sorry I didn't know it would be a problem.
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MountainHikerYou should, in the future, chose only one spot to create your post. Double posting is confusing.
MountainHiker is correct. I have merged the threads.

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