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Not native speaker: Help with Motivation letter for Master application
Any suggestion to improve it is really much appreaciated
Dear Sir or Madam,
With this letter I wish hereby to apply and state my motivation for entrance to the Master in Finance at the Collegio Carlo Alberto, for the 2015/2016 academic year.
For as long as I can remember I’ve always had a special aptitude for mathematics and my passion for it grew even further when, during my teenage years, I first heard about bonds and stocks. Without even realising it I was discovering the world of Finance, which is so full of mathematics.
Since then, the word Finance has guided my choices in schools, and the more I learned about it, the more my professional ambitions took shape. Now, having acquired a wider vision, I aim to become a brilliant portfolio manager or to work for financial firms which study new quantitative models for portfolio optimization.
My personality has continuously pushed me to give my best, so I’ve always tried to deepen quantitative and informatics skills. As a direct consequence of this evidence my classmates have often acknowledged me as a point of reference.
In the first year of master’s degree, thanks to my academic results, I have been selected to take part in the University Trading Challenge as a member of a four people team: a real money international online trading championship, where my team was the runner-up among over ninety participating universities. This was my first significant experience that allowed me to trade and invest real money on financial markets.
Finally, I graduated with honours from University of Modena and Reggio Emilia, obtaining a Master’s degree in Financial Analysis, Advising and Management. Nevertheless, I know I’m still far from achieving my goals. The passion and enthusiasm I have for Finance have made me thirsty for knowledge. This is the reason why I want to continue my studies.
Having analysed in detail Master’s courses program offered by several universities, I’ve decided to apply for the Master in Finance at the Collegio Carlo Alberto as my first and only choice, as I believe it is the most suitable for my needs. Furthermore, the strong interest I have for the subjects covered in the courses program encourages me to make every efforts in order to be the top student.
My background makes this Master an extremely valuable asset to me, but I think it is also true the other way around. These are the reasons why I believe I am an excellent candidate for the position and I would be most grateful if I were given the opportunity to prove it.
Thank you for the time you have taken to review my application.
I look forward to your acceptance.
Sincerely
Dear Sir or Madam,
With this letter I wish hereby to apply and state my motivation for entrance to the Master in Finance at the Collegio Carlo Alberto, for the 2015/2016 academic year.
For as long as I can remember I’ve always had a special aptitude for mathematics and my passion for it grew even further when, during my teenage years, I first heard about bonds and stocks. Without even realising it I was discovering the world of Finance, which is so full of mathematics.
Since then, the word Finance has guided my choices in schools, and the more I learned about it, the more my professional ambitions took shape. Now, having acquired a wider vision, I aim to become a brilliant portfolio manager or to work for financial firms which study new quantitative models for portfolio optimization.
My personality has continuously pushed me to give my best, so I’ve always tried to deepen quantitative and informatics skills. As a direct consequence of this evidence my classmates have often acknowledged me as a point of reference.
In the first year of master’s degree, thanks to my academic results, I have been selected to take part in the University Trading Challenge as a member of a four people team: a real money international online trading championship, where my team was the runner-up among over ninety participating universities. This was my first significant experience that allowed me to trade and invest real money on financial markets.
Finally, I graduated with honours from University of Modena and Reggio Emilia, obtaining a Master’s degree in Financial Analysis, Advising and Management. Nevertheless, I know I’m still far from achieving my goals. The passion and enthusiasm I have for Finance have made me thirsty for knowledge. This is the reason why I want to continue my studies.
Having analysed in detail Master’s courses program offered by several universities, I’ve decided to apply for the Master in Finance at the Collegio Carlo Alberto as my first and only choice, as I believe it is the most suitable for my needs. Furthermore, the strong interest I have for the subjects covered in the courses program encourages me to make every efforts in order to be the top student.
My background makes this Master an extremely valuable asset to me, but I think it is also true the other way around. These are the reasons why I believe I am an excellent candidate for the position and I would be most grateful if I were given the opportunity to prove it.
Thank you for the time you have taken to review my application.
I look forward to your acceptance.
Sincerely
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With this letter I wish hereby to apply and state my motivation for entrance to the Master 's in Finance degree porgram at the Collegio Carlo Alberto, for the 2015/2016 academic year. For as long as I can remember I’ve always had a special aptitude for mathematics . My passion for it grew even further intensified when, during my teenage years, I first heard about bonds and stocks.
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With this letter I wish hereby to apply and state my motivation for entrance to the Master's in Finance degree porgram at the Collegio Carlo Alberto, for the 2015/2016 academic year.
For as long as I can remember I’ve always had a special aptitude for mathematics. My passion for itgrew even further intensified when, during my teenage year
For as long as I can remember I’ve always had a special aptitude for mathematics. My passion for it
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thank you very much for your revision may I ask you a personal opinion about my motivation letter?
Do you think it is good?
I'm Giò
thank you very much for your revision may I ask you a personal opinion about my motivation letter?
Do you think it is good?
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It's good, but you could improve it by giving uniquely personal, specific experiences.
What did your team do to be first runner-up? Was it luck, or astute assumptions about the market? What was your role on the team? Were you the back-office anayst, or the team leader? How did you convince your mates to go with your strategy and picks? Did the ratings consider risk-adjusted performance, o
What did your team do to be first runner-up? Was it luck, or astute assumptions about the market? What was your role on the team? Were you the back-office anayst, or the team leader? How did you convince your mates to go with your strategy and picks? Did the ratings consider risk-adjusted performance, o
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Oh .. thank you very much for the suggestion
Unfortunately I can't answer all that question because I have a limitation of about 2500 characters that I've already reached.
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"I would add a short explanation of why you want a second master's degree"
The reason is I think that .
I could add this one: the overall sentence would be
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Unfortunately I can't answer all that question because I have a limitation of about 2500 characters that I've already reached.
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"I would add a short explanation of why you want a second master's degree"
The reason is I think that .
I could add this one: the overall sentence would be
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this would be the final? version revised
Dear Sir or Madam,
With this letter I wish to apply and state my motivation for entrance to Master's in Finance degree program at the Collegio Carlo Alberto, for the 2015/2016 academic year.
For as long as I can remember I’ve always had a special aptitude for mathematics and my passion for it intensified when, during my teenage y
Dear Sir or Madam,
With this letter I wish to apply and state my motivation for entrance to Master's in Finance degree program at the Collegio Carlo Alberto, for the 2015/2016 academic year.
For as long as I can remember I’ve always had a special aptitude for mathematics and my passion for it intensified when, during my teenage y
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Don't knock your " Nevertheless, I feel that I need additional study in a challenging academic environment to broaden my experience and prepare me for my future successful career in a very competitive industry.
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thanks star
I was reviewing the entire letter but I can't understand why you made this correction
"My background makes this Master's an extremely valuable asset to me"
why Master's?
thanks
I was reviewing the entire letter but I can't understand why you made this correction
"My background makes this Master's an extremely valuable asset to me"
why Master's?
thanks
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