Not another motivation letter ...

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00this is the 7th version of the "letter of purpose" and 5th of the "studienvorhaben" (how to translate this??). I am applying for an exchange semester at the University of California, Berkeley and the selection is based on the marks of the first year. As I am only average (of all those who are allowed to apply :-) ) the application letters must give me an edge. If you were the professor, what else would you want to know?02br
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00So please, pimp my letter!02br
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00Letter of purpose:02br
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01font00My name is **** and I am a 21 year old **** Biology student in the second year. I first took interest in life sciences during a hospital internship when I realized that even the best trained athletes can die of cancer or other diseases and health is mostly a matter of research and development. Therefore, I believe that biochemical knowledge holds the key to many diseases and highly trained specialists play an increasingly important role in the community.02font02br
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01font00Why go on exchange? Like many other students of my generation, I want to have an enjoyable and rewarding experience in a different educational and cultural environment. As a Swiss of Chinese descent I am very interested in the 010200, especially how so many different ethnic groups and cultures live together.02font02br
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01font00A former exchange student introduced me to the UCB. I was impressed by his description of American education. Courses and exercises demand a lot of active contributions from the students in form of presentations and discussion groups. But above all I am eager to do an own independent research project under professional supervision.02font02br
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01font00Moreover, I strongly believe that this is a great opportunity for me to improve my English and meet students from different countries. As I have never been to an English speaking country for a longer period of time before, I think that an exchange would benefit me a lot.02font02br
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01font00I am certain that studying and living in a foreign country encourages initiative, independence and responsibility. When I moved to 00to live on my own and began studying at the ****, I was a bit overwhelmed in the beginning but the new challenges in 00motivated me to do my best and I earned a good result in the exams. I think that my motivation and commitment grow along with higher challenges.02font02br
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01font00This exchange is a unique opportunity for me and I am very interested and motivated in studying for a semester at the UCB. Thank you for taking the time to review my letter and application.02font02br
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01font00Yours Sincerely,02font02br
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