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Anonymous Posted 19 years ago
Letter Writing

Non native-speaker needs your help! Could you correct my cover letter?

0As a non native-speaker I have some problems writing my cover letter to a Canadian company. I would be very thankful if you could have a look at this: 02br
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00Dear Mr 01i00_______02i02br
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00I would like to apply for the HR internship that you recently advertised on 01i00_______. I first became interested in HR through a two year commercial apprenticeship at______02i00. During this period I was able to gain deep insights in all functional areas (including HR) of an industrial firm, learned how to work independently and responsibly and got very familiar with the whole MS Office package.02br
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00Since October 2002 I am studying for my Diploma in Business Administration with Human Resources, Business Management and Management Psychology as my majors at the University01i00___02i00. After having passed my Intermediate Examination in 2004 I took part in an exchange program and studied for one semester at the_______School of Management in 010200 where I experienced different customs and cultures. To finish my studies I am going to write my final thesis in Management Psychology from April to August 2007. Before I start my professional career in my country I would like to apply my theoretical knowledge in practice within the scope of a stay in your company.02br
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00In addition to my studies I also gained further practical HR experience. During an internship with01b00 02b01i00_______02i00 I assisted in the daily work, recruiting and training’s feedback evaluation. My responsibility included among other things the communication with the candidates, the planning of the interviews, the conduction of parts of the interviews and the planning of the initial skill adaptation training of new employees. 02br
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00Within my work for (01i00name of student organization02i00) I am member of a team which is responsible for the recruiting and preparation of the outgoing interns. 02br
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00I am very interested in doing a four to five-month internship at 01i00____02i00 starting in September 2007. In your large and international-active company and the offered internship I see the possibility of combining the appliance and enrichment of my theoretical and practical knowledge with new cultural experiences. Especially the work in “Compensation & Benefits” is of interest for me as it offers the opportunity to apply not only my knowledge of HR but also of Accounting. After my stay at various companies I am now very keen on broadening my work experience in 010200 to get to know the Canadian culture, the working life and the way of life. An internship in your company would represent a special challenge for me.02br
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00Being a reliable team player I am motivated and willing to contribute to your success. Besides speaking English fluently I am native speaker of German and have very good knowledge of French. 02br
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00For further information please feel free to contact me at anytime. I am looking forward to hearing from you. 02br
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00Yours sincerely,02br
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0Since October 2002 I 01b 00have been02b 00 studying for my Diploma 02br 02br 00After 01b 00passing02b 00 my Intermediate Examination in 2004 02br 02br 00I am going to write my final 01b 00thesis, from April to August 2007, in02b 00 Management Psychology . 02br 02br 01b 00training feedback02b 00 evaluation. My 01b 00responsibilities included, among other things, communication02b 00 with 01del 00the02del 00 candidates, 01del 00the02del 00 planning 01del 00of the02del 00 interviews, 01del 00the02del 00 01b 00conducting 02b 00parts of the interviews and 01del 00the02del 00 planning 01del 00of 02del 00the initial skill adaptation training of new employees.

  • 0Since October 2002 I 01b 00have been02b 00 studying for my Diploma 02br 02br 00After 01b 00passing02b 00 my Intermediate Examination in 2004 02br 02br 00I am going to write my final 01b 00thesis, from April to August 2007, in02b 00 Management Psychology .
  • 02br 02br 01b 00training feedback02b 00 evaluation.
  • My 01b 00responsibilities included, among other things, communication02b 00 with 01del 00the02del 00 candidates, 01del 00the02del 00 planning 01del 00of the02del 00 interviews, 01del 00the02del 00 01b 00conducting 02b 00parts of the interviews and 01del 00the02del 00 planning 01del 00of 02del 00the initial skill adaptation training of new employees.
  • 02br 02br 00Within my work for (01i 00name of student organization02i 00) I am member of a team01b 00,02b 00 which is responsible for the 01b 00recruitment02b 00 and preparation of the outgoing interns.
  • 01b 00a02b 00ccounting.
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0Since October 2002 I 01b00have been02b00 studying for my Diploma 02br
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00After 01b00passing02b00 my Intermediate Examination in 2004 02br
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00I am going to write my final 01b00thesis, from April to August 2007, in02b00 Management Psychology . 02br
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0Thanks a lot 05002br
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00I was not sure if i used all the expressions correctly. Now I feel good about sending the letter. 051010id111id2

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