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Noemanza Posted 16 years ago
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Noemanza
please!!!! It´s important. can someone help me? it´s rigth my essay?
In the past, the food production starting from animals were a slow making-process but it was very suitable.
The present circunstances in EEUU and other share of the world is very different. Nowadays the Little farms had disappeared and the big companies have the power and control of the production and dsitribution of the food we eat.
Now the animals are feeding with enriched food with hormones and carbohydrates, so they grow up quicklyer and they covert in obeses animals very weak. But the big companies are satisfied because duplícate theirs incomes.
The animals don´t live in the pastures, now are shut up i the stables, where the life coditions are unhealthy.
In spite of being in the age of information, the big companies hide their secrets because they don´t want to show the dangerous of their products, moreover the goverment is accesory to these fraud and it doesn´t resolve the problema.
To avoid illess, they administer them antibiotics every animal, before only give them to sick animals, by this the traps increase their resitance.
This food besides being bad for the people, it´s also fattening.
in the mass prodution doesn´t take the neccesary precautions and the risk of contaminations is very big.
It´s neccesary making medications inspections periodically, so the animals will be under control. their meal is more and more artificial and there are more health problems cause by bad diet of this animals.
Many people have choresterol because they eat this rubbish food. If the animals grow up in the pastures, their meat would be more healthy, and the same pass with the vegetables.
the goverment should rely the small farmers who use natural method, because the food which take in the mass prudutions hasn´t nutricional value.
In the past, the food production starting from animals were a slow making-process but it was very suitable.
The present circunstances in EEUU and other share of the world is very different. Nowadays the Little farms had disappeared and the big companies have the power and control of the production and dsitribution of the food we eat.
Now the animals are feeding with enriched food with hormones and carbohydrates, so they grow up quicklyer and they covert in obeses animals very weak. But the big companies are satisfied because duplícate theirs incomes.
The animals don´t live in the pastures, now are shut up i the stables, where the life coditions are unhealthy.
In spite of being in the age of information, the big companies hide their secrets because they don´t want to show the dangerous of their products, moreover the goverment is accesory to these fraud and it doesn´t resolve the problema.
To avoid illess, they administer them antibiotics every animal, before only give them to sick animals, by this the traps increase their resitance.
This food besides being bad for the people, it´s also fattening.
in the mass prodution doesn´t take the neccesary precautions and the risk of contaminations is very big.
It´s neccesary making medications inspections periodically, so the animals will be under control. their meal is more and more artificial and there are more health problems cause by bad diet of this animals.
Many people have choresterol because they eat this rubbish food. If the animals grow up in the pastures, their meat would be more healthy, and the same pass with the vegetables.
the goverment should rely the small farmers who use natural method, because the food which take in the mass prudutions hasn´t nutricional value.
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I have underlined some problem areas and crossed out inappropriate verbiage: In the past, the food production starting from animals were a slow making-process but it was very suitable . The present circunstances in EEUU and other share of the world is very different. Nowadays the Little farms had disappeared and the big companies have the power and control of the production and dsitribution of the food we eat.
- I have underlined some problem areas and crossed out inappropriate verbiage: In the past, the food production starting from animals were a slow making-process but it was very suitable .
- The present circunstances in EEUU and other share of the world is very different.
- Nowadays the Little farms had disappeared and the big companies have the power and control of the production and dsitribution of the food we eat.
- Now the animals are feeding with enriched food with hormones and carbohydrates, so they grow up quicklyer and they covert in obeses animals very weak .
- But the big companies are satisfied because duplícate theirs incomes.
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I have underlined some problem areas and crossed out inappropriate verbiage:
In the past,the food production starting from animals were a slow making-process but it was very suitable.
The present circunstances in EEUU and other share of the world is
In the past,
The present circunstances in EEUU and other share of the world is
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thank you, very much.
I try correct it, but something I don´t know.
In the past, food production based on animals were been a slow process but it was the most appropriate.
The present situation in USA and other part of the world is very different. Nowadays small farms have disappeared and big companies have power and control of the production and dsitribution of the f
I try correct it, but something I don´t know.
In the past, food production based on animals were been a slow process but it was the most appropriate.
The present situation in USA and other part of the world is very different. Nowadays small farms have disappeared and big companies have power and control of the production and dsitribution of the f
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In the past, food production based on animals were been a slow process but it was the most appropriate.
The present situation in USA and other part of the world is very different. Nowadays small farms have disappeared and big companies have power and control of the production and dsitribution of the food we eat.
Now the animals are fed with enriched food with
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