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Mr. Tom Posted 13 years ago
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Negotiating the scorching heat of the sun, he walked...
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Could you please see these lines, especially the yellow parts? Is the register OK (as part of a short story)? Any suggestions are welcome.
He knew it would soon cool down along with all other emotions that had lain so sorely inside him for such a long time.
Thanks,
Tom
Could you please see these lines, especially the yellow parts? Is the register OK (as part of a short story)? Any suggestions are welcome.
He knew it would soon cool down along with all other emotions that had lain so sorely inside him for such a long time.
Thanks,
Tom
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"Negotiating" seems wrong. I don't think "sorely" works, either. The rest is OK.
- "Negotiating" seems wrong.
- I don't think "sorely" works, either.
- The rest is OK.
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"Negotiating" seems wrong. I don't think "sorely" works, either. The rest is OK.
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