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Tenacious Learner Posted 15 years ago
Grammar

Neeed correction. Deborah.

Hi Teachers,

Could you correct this short story please? Any contributions are more than welcome.

It’s half past ten. Deborah is having breakfast and listening to some music on the radio. The maid is carrying a tray with some more coffee on it.

Now it’s around one. Deborah and her friends are having lunch. They aren’t having coffee yet. They are talking about a movie.

Thanks in advance
  

Top answer

Thinking Spain The maid is carrying a tray with some more coffee on it. More coffee? There's no previous mention of any coffee.

  • Thinking Spain The maid is carrying a tray with some more coffee on it.
  • More coffee?
  • There's no previous mention of any coffee.
  • How about The maid is carrying a pot of coffee.
  • CJ
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Thinking SpainThe maid is carrying a tray with some more coffee on it.
More coffee? There's no previous mention of any coffee. How about The maid is carrying a pot of coffee.

CJ
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Hi Jim,

There's no previous mention of any coffee. How about The maid is carrying a pot of coffee.

You are absolutely right! I'll change it immediately.

I remember in one of your post you told me that nowadays the word to be explainmed in put Italics but I prefr to use Italics and single quotation marks like in thi
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Thinking SpainI prefr to use Italics and single quotation marks like in this one:

The opposite of loses is wins. Am I that wrong?
It's what we might call "overkill".
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Hi,

A small point.

Very generally speaking, I like to keep such examples close to the students' own experiences. Do many people in Spain have a maid? They don't in Canada.

Clive
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Hi Jim,

It's what we might call "overkill".Ok since I don't want to be a killer, Emotion: sad
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Hi Clive,

Do many people in Spain have a maid?No they don't. But the story was written or changed by me in Mexico where they do. Deborah and her maid are in a few stories, so they interact themselves. Besides the stories there's vocabulary, questions, and exercises. I don't have the time to change them now. But I will in the future. I promise.
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Thinking SpainThere's no problem if I use single instead of double, right?
Right.

CJ
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Hi Clive,

Thank you for your reply. These little things are really important to me.

Sleep well.

TS
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Hi Clive Jim,

Thank you for your reply. These little things are really important to me.

Sleep well.

TS

Ophss! Sorry I couldn't change the n

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