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Anonymous Posted 15 years ago
Grammar
Needless Phrases and Redundancy
Needless phrases are common phrases that are unnecessary to the meaning of a sentence.
Redundancy is where two or more words are being used to say the same thing.
Revise each wordy sentence to eliminate needless phrases, redundancy and repetition.
Can you please see if I am on the right track?
Due to the fact that we made the lowest bid, we won the contract.
Revision: We made the lowest bid and won the contract.
We have completely eliminated 100% of the bugs from this program.
Revision: We have elminiated all of the bugs from this program.
Power surges are associated, in a causative way, with malfunctions of computers.
Revision: Power surges cause malfunctions of computers. OR? Power surges cause computers to malfunction.
The appearance of this problem was just yesterday.
Revision: This problem appeared yesterday.
Please perform an analysis and make an evaluation of our new system.
Revision: Please analyze and evaluate our new system.
Redundancy is where two or more words are being used to say the same thing.
Revise each wordy sentence to eliminate needless phrases, redundancy and repetition.
Can you please see if I am on the right track?
Due to the fact that we made the lowest bid, we won the contract.
Revision: We made the lowest bid and won the contract.
We have completely eliminated 100% of the bugs from this program.
Revision: We have elminiated all of the bugs from this program.
Power surges are associated, in a causative way, with malfunctions of computers.
Revision: Power surges cause malfunctions of computers. OR? Power surges cause computers to malfunction.
The appearance of this problem was just yesterday.
Revision: This problem appeared yesterday.
Please perform an analysis and make an evaluation of our new system.
Revision: Please analyze and evaluate our new system.
Top answer
Anonymous Due to the fact that we made the lowest bid, we won the contract. Revision: We made the lowest bid and won the contract. We won the contract because we made the lowest bid.
- Anonymous Due to the fact that we made the lowest bid, we won the contract.
- Revision: We made the lowest bid and won the contract.
- We won the contract because we made the lowest bid.
- Anonymous We have completely eliminated 100% of the bugs from this program.
- Revision: We have eliminated all of the bugs from this program.
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AnonymousDue to the fact that we made the lowest bid, we won the contract.We won the contract because we made the lowest bid.
Revision: We made the lowest bid and won the contract.
AnonymousWe have completely eliminated 100% of the bugs from this program.
Revision: We have eliminated all of the bugs from this program.
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