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Zinczl Posted 20 years ago
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01 font 00 Traditionally, single-dependant students are assisted by their parents in pursuing post-secondary education. If your parents are not able to provide financial assistance or are providing minimal assistance, please explain why. 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 If there is additional information that we should know in order to evaluate this application, please feel free to include a confidential statement regarding the extenuating circumstances 02 font 02 br
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00 I am a candidate whose parents are providing minimal assistance. Unlike traditional parents in 01 02 00 , since I was young, my parents have been demanding absolute independence of finance on me. At present, especially as an adult, they concluded that they provide the tuition fees only and ask me to gain the support by hardworking. 02 br
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00 Until now, most of my tuition fees and pocket money are gained by my labor. At the age of 10, my parents set a rule which indicate how much I can earn by doing categories of housework. For instance, cooking one dinner can make me 6-yuan and washing the fridge could be 3. These days I am teaching a foreigner English for pay. That is the concept of their education all along. They restrict me on one hand and give the freedom on the other hand. 02 br
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00 Furthermore, study abroad need a lot of money, though my family have save a lot of expenses on traveling or other family entertainment, it is still very hard for my family to support my study abroad. Moreover, as I would be far away from my parents in the near future, I can’t offer them proper care when they get sick, so I’d like to save money as much as I can so that a sum of money can be put away in case of any emergency. 02 br
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00 00 Consequently, I am grateful to them for their fosterage and applying for you financial aid 00 . 02 br
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01 font 00 Traditionally, single-dependant students are assisted by their parents in pursuing post-secondary education. If your parents are not able to provide financial assistance or are providing minimal assistance, please explain why. 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 If there is additional information that we should know in order to evaluate this application, please feel free to include a confidential statement regarding the extenuating circumstances 02 font 02 br
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00 I am a candidate whose parents are providing minimal assistance. Unlike traditional parents in 01 02 00 , since I was young, my parents have been demanding absolute independence of finance on me. At present, especially as an adult, they concluded that they provide the tuition fees only and ask me to gain the support by hardworking. 02 br
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00 Until now, most of my tuition fees and pocket money are gained by my labor. At the age of 10, my parents set a rule which indicate how much I can earn by doing categories of housework. For instance, cooking one dinner can make me 6-yuan and washing the fridge could be 3. These days I am teaching a foreigner English for pay. That is the concept of their education all along. They restrict me on one hand and give the freedom on the other hand. 02 br
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00 Furthermore, study abroad need a lot of money, though my family have save a lot of expenses on traveling or other family entertainment, it is still very hard for my family to support my study abroad. Moreover, as I would be far away from my parents in the near future, I can’t offer them proper care when they get sick, so I’d like to save money as much as I can so that a sum of money can be put away in case of any emergency. 02 br
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00 00 Consequently, I am grateful to them for their fosterage and applying for you financial aid 00 . 02 br
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1 i 00 Hi - I think you need to make a lot of changes. A lot of this information is not relevant and you have missed out some important information. How much money will your parents provide - absolutely nothing, minimal = something, what?
- 1 i 00 Hi - I think you need to make a lot of changes.
- A lot of this information is not relevant and you have missed out some important information.
- How much money will your parents provide - absolutely nothing, minimal = something, what?
- How will you have to support yourself otherwise - by working?
- How will this effect your 02 i 00 01 i 00 studies?
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1 i 00 Hi - I think you need to make a lot of changes. A lot of this information is not relevant and you have missed out some important information. How much money will your parents provide - absolutely nothing, minimal = something, what? How will you have to support yourself otherwise - by working? How will this effect your 02 i 00 01 i 00 studies? Normally people give deta
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