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Jennifermk Posted 17 years ago
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Need Your Help with Editing 2 Paragraphs (Need to be done by tomorrow) Thanks.

A:The author of "Lost Red Apple" Theresa Olson expressed her feelings about culture lost.
Her grandparents were white and aboriginal. She is second generation of mixed
background. Back then women did not have the rights and no full status were given to
them, because of the interracial marriages, yet some of the worst thing the children being
born with the couple were not recognized. Regardless all of that, when Theresa Olson
decided to take this Native Administration course at school and learned about Red Apple,
she discovered how rich native was before the invasion of Europeans, learned about the
tradition background, and she is planning to teach her daughter native cultural
background.





B: First of all people come in all colours and cultural background. But the author of Pretty



Like White Boy Drew Hayden Taylor faced different challenges through out his life.



Because of his appearance, blue eyes white boy he did not look like aboriginal in the



brown people village although he was biracial with native and white background. In



such case, he felt singled out by the society and his community, he had to proof his



identity, and it was stressful for him to find his dream job in internment industry.
  

Top answer

A is rather confusing. You might want to stick to simpler sentences. Highlighted a few things for you to fix in B.

  • A is rather confusing.
  • You might want to stick to simpler sentences.
  • Highlighted a few things for you to fix in B.
  • B: First of all people come in all colours and cultural background.
  • But the author of Pretty Like White Boy Drew Hayden Taylor (it's a book; punctuate accordingly) faced different challenges throughout his life.
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A is rather confusing. You might want to stick to simpler sentences.

Highlighted a few things for you to fix in B.


B: First of all people come in all colours and cultural background. But the author of Pretty



Like White Boy Drew Hayden Taylor (it's a book; punctuate accordingly) faced different challenges throughout his life.

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