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Anonymous Posted 20 years ago
Letter Writing
need your help plz @ my letter of motivation
hi guys,
could you do me the favour and check my letter of motivation. (mistakes, bad formulations, commas etc.)
I am applying for an internship in the USA.
This letter of motivation is send to a company that is looking for an internship place for me. Thats why I don't have the names of the persons and the name of the company.
Tank you in advance
diehard
22. May 2006
Letter of Motivation
To whom it may concern
Dear Madam / Sir,
thank you for giving me the opportunity to apply for an internship in the field of journalism. I am a student for English and Political Science at the University of ........., Germany. I am very interested in the field of journalism. I always like to be informed about the daily happenings and I also like to inform other people about what happened in the world.
I have already gained some practical experiences by working at the university radio. I started this job because I am very interested in music and in the radio. It is only a small and not commercial radio station. I don’t earn money there but it is very interesting.Additionally I had courses at the university in Media Science where I learned the theory about the work of a journalist. With an internship in Washington D.C., I would learn a lot about the work and the daily life of a journalist in the USA. I would gain many important experiences for my future career in journalism.
My professional goal is to work one day in the media. At the moment, I am not sure which kind of media would be the most interesting for me. I will try to do as many internships as possible during my time as student. By this, I will gain experiences in working as a journalist. These experiences are very important for my future plans because for most companies it is important to have employees who already gained experiences in the field of journalism. Especially experiences that were gained abroad are a big advantage.
As I study English, it is very interesting for me to live for four months in an English speaking country, especially in the USA. It would be great for me to work in Washington D.C. Washington D.C. is a big and famous city where many decisions in politics are made and where a lot of broadcasting stations, radio stations and newspapers are at home. Due to my interest in English and the United States, it would be a very good time for me. I would improve my communication skills and I would become a more independent person afterwards.
For the company, I will be a reliable and hard-working person. I would be very happy if I can make my internship at a broadcasting station, a radio station or a newspaper. I will be a fast learning employee who is always interested and friendly.
Yours Sincerly,
diehard ;-)
could you do me the favour and check my letter of motivation. (mistakes, bad formulations, commas etc.)
I am applying for an internship in the USA.
This letter of motivation is send to a company that is looking for an internship place for me. Thats why I don't have the names of the persons and the name of the company.
Tank you in advance
diehard
22. May 2006
Letter of Motivation
To whom it may concern
Dear Madam / Sir,
thank you for giving me the opportunity to apply for an internship in the field of journalism. I am a student for English and Political Science at the University of ........., Germany. I am very interested in the field of journalism. I always like to be informed about the daily happenings and I also like to inform other people about what happened in the world.
I have already gained some practical experiences by working at the university radio. I started this job because I am very interested in music and in the radio. It is only a small and not commercial radio station. I don’t earn money there but it is very interesting.Additionally I had courses at the university in Media Science where I learned the theory about the work of a journalist. With an internship in Washington D.C., I would learn a lot about the work and the daily life of a journalist in the USA. I would gain many important experiences for my future career in journalism.
My professional goal is to work one day in the media. At the moment, I am not sure which kind of media would be the most interesting for me. I will try to do as many internships as possible during my time as student. By this, I will gain experiences in working as a journalist. These experiences are very important for my future plans because for most companies it is important to have employees who already gained experiences in the field of journalism. Especially experiences that were gained abroad are a big advantage.
As I study English, it is very interesting for me to live for four months in an English speaking country, especially in the USA. It would be great for me to work in Washington D.C. Washington D.C. is a big and famous city where many decisions in politics are made and where a lot of broadcasting stations, radio stations and newspapers are at home. Due to my interest in English and the United States, it would be a very good time for me. I would improve my communication skills and I would become a more independent person afterwards.
For the company, I will be a reliable and hard-working person. I would be very happy if I can make my internship at a broadcasting station, a radio station or a newspaper. I will be a fast learning employee who is always interested and friendly.
Yours Sincerly,
diehard ;-)
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is there no one who wants to tell me his opinion about the text? thx
- is there no one who wants to tell me his opinion about the text?
- thx
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is there no one who wants to tell me his opinion about the text?
thx
thx
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is there no one who wants to write his opinion about my text.
thx in advance
thx in advance
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OK, Diehard:
22 May 2006
Dear Sir or Madam:
Thank you for giving me the opportunity to apply for an internship in the field of journalism. I am a student of English and Political Science at the University of ........., Germany. I am very interested in journalism. I always like to be informed about daily events, and I also like to inform other people
22 May 2006
Dear Sir or Madam:
Thank you for giving me the opportunity to apply for an internship in the field of journalism. I am a student of English and Political Science at the University of ........., Germany. I am very interested in journalism. I always like to be informed about daily events, and I also like to inform other people
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Thank you very much.
I appreciate it.
I just have two questions:
1. What the difference betwenn just "media" and "live-media" as you wrote?
2. In the fourth paragraph: I think there is a "to" missing. Between "me" and "spend", isn't it?
thank you
diehard
I appreciate it.
I just have two questions:
1. What the difference betwenn just "media" and "live-media" as you wrote?
2. In the fourth paragraph: I think there is a "to" missing. Between "me" and "spend", isn't it?
thank you
diehard
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1-- Media include the live media (TV, films, radio) and the print media (newspapers and magazines). I thought from your text that you only meant the former; if that is not the case, please delete live.
2-- Good eye. Sorry, my mistake-- I have fixed it in the post above.
2-- Good eye. Sorry, my mistake-- I have fixed it in the post above.
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Alright, thank you.
I have another question concerning the form.
Do I have to write the sentence "To whom it may concern" or can I leave it out.
And what is the most common formulation: 1) Dear Sir or Madam, (and continue without capital letter.)
2) Dear Sir or Madam: and then capital letters.
I have another question concerning the form.
Do I have to write the sentence "To whom it may concern" or can I leave it out.
And what is the most common formulation: 1) Dear Sir or Madam, (and continue without capital letter.)
2) Dear Sir or Madam: and then capital letters.
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As you see, I took it out. To whom it may concern is an antiquated greeting, and is better replaced by Dear Sir or Madam. Certainly, do not use both.
As for your other questions, please look at the corrected letter: I have set it up as it should be.
As for your other questions, please look at the corrected letter: I have set it up as it should be.
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