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Toto.. Posted 19 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
need your help please
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00 this is a paragraph whish I wrote. I will be grateful if. you read it and tell me if is ok or not and what are the mistakes i did.. 02 br
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00 01 font 00 There are a lot of things which we all own. Some of these items are considered important especially when they are expensive. Moreover, some can be the most valuable items. Of course that would differ from a person to another. The book "Don't be Sad " is my most valuable item I ever had although it does not cost me much. For me, it is the light in the darkness of this world. Whenever I feel sad, it is there to illuminate my sad heart .As soon as I start reading among its pages, I find the cure for all my pains . 02 font 01 font 00 In brief 00 , if I don’t have this book my life and thoughts would be so different. 02 font 00 0-
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00 this is a paragraph whish I wrote. I will be grateful if. you read it and tell me if is ok or not and what are the mistakes i did.. 02 br
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00 thanks 02 br
00 01 font 00 There are a lot of things which we all own. Some of these items are considered important especially when they are expensive. Moreover, some can be the most valuable items. Of course that would differ from a person to another. The book "Don't be Sad " is my most valuable item I ever had although it does not cost me much. For me, it is the light in the darkness of this world. Whenever I feel sad, it is there to illuminate my sad heart .As soon as I start reading among its pages, I find the cure for all my pains . 02 font 01 font 00 In brief 00 , if I don’t have this book my life and thoughts would be so different. 02 font 00 0-
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0 You've made a fairly good start with it. There are a few mistakes which I've corrected. 05 0 02 br 02 br 01 font 00 There are plenty of items that we own.
- 0 You've made a fairly good start with it.
- There are a few mistakes which I've corrected.
- 05 0 02 br 02 br 01 font 00 There are plenty of items that we own.
- Some of these items are considered important particulary if they are expensive.
- Moreover, some can be the most 01 font 00 (wasn't sure whether you were trying to say invaluable instead of valuable) 02 font 00 valuable items.
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0 You've made a fairly good start with it. There are a few mistakes which I've corrected. I've tried to alter the mistakes without completely changing/affecting the paragraph... 05 0 02 br
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01 font 00 There are plenty of items that we own. Some of these items are considered important particulary if they are expensive. Moreover, some can be the most
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01 font 00 There are plenty of items that we own. Some of these items are considered important particulary if they are expensive. Moreover, some can be the most
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0 hi ..K-M, 02 br
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00 Thanks alot for giving a time to help me.I' m very grateful that you've corrected my mistakes. 0-
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00 Thanks alot for giving a time to help me.I' m very grateful that you've corrected my mistakes. 0-
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