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Essay & Composition Writing
Need your help.........
My lecturer ask me to do a descriptive essay.......Please let me know my mistakes.....
My House
For me, a good family doesn't perfect without a place to live together.In fact,I believe that a good person comes from a good family and a good family needs a proper place to live,or what we called house.I didn't see a house is just a place to go after spend the day at the office or just a place to sleep.It's a place to develope a good personality in every human.I can say and I belive that everything starts from home.
I have a big family and of course we need a proper place to live together.Now,we live at Paka and my father bought a house 4 years ago.It's a bungalow with 6 rooms and 4 bathrooms.We live in a housing scheme and the neighbours are very kind to us.
My house is yellow in color with red roof.There is 3 blue gates in front of the house and a porch.Our compound is beside the porch.It's not a big one,but full of trees and flower plants.My mother loves to plant the trees to make the compound looks attractive and beautiful.As we enter the house,there is 2 living rooms and the first is for the guests.My mother puts a red sofa with two coffee tables at the corner of the room and a pink curtain for the sliding door.The second is for our family.Actually,it's a place for us to watch the tv and relax in the evening.My brother puts a tv and DVD player on the rack.There is a set sofa with smooth pillows to make us comfortable when watching the tv.My brother also fills the rack with our medals and souvenirs.Beside the second living room is a dining room.There is a dining table with 8 chairs.
For the master bedroom,my mother puts a queen-size bed,2 wardrobes and a tv.My father loves to watch the tv for the late night shows.My rooms is next to my parent's.I prefer a single bed as i not sharing the room with other siblings.In front of the bed is a wardrobe and a table for study.I choose pink curtains for the windows.
Eventhough my house is not big and beautiful as others,but I love to share it with my family.We just love the house because we can live together under the roof.
My House
For me, a good family doesn't perfect without a place to live together.In fact,I believe that a good person comes from a good family and a good family needs a proper place to live,or what we called house.I didn't see a house is just a place to go after spend the day at the office or just a place to sleep.It's a place to develope a good personality in every human.I can say and I belive that everything starts from home.
I have a big family and of course we need a proper place to live together.Now,we live at Paka and my father bought a house 4 years ago.It's a bungalow with 6 rooms and 4 bathrooms.We live in a housing scheme and the neighbours are very kind to us.
My house is yellow in color with red roof.There is 3 blue gates in front of the house and a porch.Our compound is beside the porch.It's not a big one,but full of trees and flower plants.My mother loves to plant the trees to make the compound looks attractive and beautiful.As we enter the house,there is 2 living rooms and the first is for the guests.My mother puts a red sofa with two coffee tables at the corner of the room and a pink curtain for the sliding door.The second is for our family.Actually,it's a place for us to watch the tv and relax in the evening.My brother puts a tv and DVD player on the rack.There is a set sofa with smooth pillows to make us comfortable when watching the tv.My brother also fills the rack with our medals and souvenirs.Beside the second living room is a dining room.There is a dining table with 8 chairs.
For the master bedroom,my mother puts a queen-size bed,2 wardrobes and a tv.My father loves to watch the tv for the late night shows.My rooms is next to my parent's.I prefer a single bed as i not sharing the room with other siblings.In front of the bed is a wardrobe and a table for study.I choose pink curtains for the windows.
Eventhough my house is not big and beautiful as others,but I love to share it with my family.We just love the house because we can live together under the roof.
Top answer
In the first line, change doesn't to isn't. When saying, "or what we call house" i think you mean what we call home. House refers to the actual building, and home refers to the actual family home.
- In the first line, change doesn't to isn't.
- When saying, "or what we call house" i think you mean what we call home.
- House refers to the actual building, and home refers to the actual family home.
- I didn't see a house is..
- i think you want to change that to as When spelling develop, there is no "e" after the "p" When describing the color of the house, it is not necessary to say yellow in color.
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In the first line, change doesn't to isn't.
When saying, "or what we call house" i think you mean what we call home. House refers to the actual building, and home refers to the actual family home.
I didn't see a house is.. i think you want to change that to as
When spelling develop, there is no "e" after the "p"
When describing the color of the house, it is not
When saying, "or what we call house" i think you mean what we call home. House refers to the actual building, and home refers to the actual family home.
I didn't see a house is.. i think you want to change that to as
When spelling develop, there is no "e" after the "p"
When describing the color of the house, it is not
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