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WANG CHUN Posted 21 years ago
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Disadvantages of sports are less than advantages of sports for children in my book.
Parents place their young children in kindergarten.
There is a common phenomenon that modern young students like to eat saturated-fat food, especially fast food
Can you help me check these sentences.
Thank you for your help.
Disadvantages of sports are less than advantages of sports for children in my book.
Parents place their young children in kindergarten.
There is a common phenomenon that modern young students like to eat saturated-fat food, especially fast food
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hello **** Chun, Your sentences are not "bad" in themselves, but they do need a bit of polishing. 1 - "Disadvantages of sports are less than advantages of sports for children in my book. " You could reput it this way: In my book, there are many more advantages than disadvantages resulting from the practice of sports for children .
- hello **** Chun, Your sentences are not "bad" in themselves, but they do need a bit of polishing.
- 1 - "Disadvantages of sports are less than advantages of sports for children in my book.
- " You could reput it this way: In my book, there are many more advantages than disadvantages resulting from the practice of sports for children .
- to my eyes, "practicing" is better than "doing" for sports; emphase should be put on the source of your statement, your book; the positive form, unless you attack another argument maybe, is usually better; although my sentence also could use some more polishing and thinking, I think it shows a bit the kind of remodeling the two other could use.
- Your second sentence is also a very direct statement.
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hello **** Chun,
Your sentences are not "bad" in themselves, but they do need a bit of polishing.
1 - "Disadvantages of sports are less than advantages of sports for children in my book. "
You could reput it this way:
In my book, there are many more advantages than disadvantages resulting from the practice of sports for children .
to my eyes, "
Your sentences are not "bad" in themselves, but they do need a bit of polishing.
1 - "Disadvantages of sports are less than advantages of sports for children in my book. "
You could reput it this way:
In my book, there are many more advantages than disadvantages resulting from the practice of sports for children .
to my eyes, "
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