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Akki Posted 19 years ago
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00Read the exerpt below to deterimine the grammar of the paragraph.02br
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00ABC stores will offer discounts and coupons which will entice customer to step inside our stores. Offers include, but are not limited to: $10 gift certificates upon spending $100 in a particular month, 00which differs from the corporation's current offer of $10 back for every $200 spent. (is the highlighted part gramatically correct?).02br
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00Did the above sound better or is this a better way of saying it...02br
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00which differs from our current $10 back for every $200 spent, offered to customers now.02br
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00I appreciate your opinion regaring the highlighted part.0-
  

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02br 02br 01font 00ABC stores will offer discounts and coup01font 00ons02font 00 01font 00to02font 00 entice customer01font 00s02font 00 to step inside our stores. Offers include, but are not limited to01font 01b 00,02b 00 02font 00$10 gift certificates upon spending $100 in a particular month02font 01font 00. 02font 00This00 differs from our current offer of $10 back for every $200 spent.

  • 02br 02br 01font 00ABC stores will offer discounts and coup01font 00ons02font 00 01font 00to02font 00 entice customer01font 00s02font 00 to step inside our stores.
  • Offers include, but are not limited to01font 01b 00,02b 00 02font 00$10 gift certificates upon spending $100 in a particular month02font 01font 00.
  • 02font 00This00 differs from our current offer of $10 back for every $200 spent.
  • 02br 02br 00You could also say 01font 00This01i 00 improves on02i 00 our current offer of $10 back for every $200 spent.
  • 02font 02br 02br 02br 00Best wishes, Clive02br 00 0-
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0Hi,02br
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00I suggest this.02br
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01font00ABC stores will offer discounts and coup01font00ons02font00 01font00to02font00 entice customer01font00s02font00 to step inside our stores. Offers in

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