Need some help in regards to my IELTS practice essay

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00My IELTS exam will be in April. I was born and raised in Germany butI lived in the States for about 4 years. Well anyways, currently I am studying for the exam. I wrote an essay and want to hear some opinions about it. Fact is, there have been some heated discussions about the topic. Some of my friends said I missed the topic, others said I didnt.02br
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01b00Some businesses now say that no one can smoke cigarettes in any of their offices. Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons. 02b02br
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00Some people said I was supposed to agree or disagree to whether smoking has been banned in offices and public places. I thought I had to agree or disagree to a smoking ban in general. Let me know what you guys think.02br
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00Oh and here is the essay, maybe someone has any suggestions on how to write or summarize it better. I did try to put in my personal experience as a nurse.02br
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00With the appearance of the first law restricting smoking in public places in 1973, the smoking ban is one of the most heated debate throughout the world. 02br
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00Restricting the places where people can smoke is a constant reminder to the public that smoking remains the leading preventable cause of death worldwide, and that its effects spread far beyond the smoker. According to the World Health Organization passive smoking increases health risks such as cardiovascular disease and premature death in non-smokers. Children are especially vulnerable to tobacco smoke.02br
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00Being a non-smoker I agree to smoking bans in certain settings, such as workplaces and enclosed public spaces, mainly on the grounds of hygiene and safety. 02br
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00I believe smoking restrictions in workplaces, for example, protects workers from harmful effects of second hand smoke and subsequently reduces the absenteeism from smoking and passive smoking diseases. In addition, bans of smoking improves work productivity and reduces the risk of fires in areas where flammable materials are stored or handled. It is scientifically proven that non-smoking in bars and restaurants improves the air quality and cleanliness of such establishments. 02br
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00Research and my experience as a nurse have shown that smoking bans reduce smoking overall. For many people it is a hassle to walk or drive to the nearest designated smoking area, they consume less tobacco and eventually quit smoking.02br
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00The physical and medical consequences of active and passive smoking are immense. It is important for everyone to understand why it is necessary to prevent smoking in public places. There is no doubt that smoking bans will always be criticised. I think, in order for this law to be successfully implemented into our society, it has to be strongly enforced by local authorities worldwide.02br
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00Thanks for the help!!!!02br
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