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Hi everyone, I wrote a cover letter for a job position that I would really like to get and would help me to start my professional career.

I have been working on the letter for over a week now, but I still think I made some grammar mistakes. Could you help me correct them, please? Thanks a lot!

Dear x,

As soon as I saw the job position as xx advertised on the xx website, I knew immediately that this role would be perfect for me and that I would be a perfect fit for the role.

My personal interest in the arts and my strong desire to work in this field, led me, two years ago, to the take the decision to move to London and undertake a Masters degree in Global Creative and Cultural Industries, which I have recently completed at xxx. Concurrently with my educational commitments (both undergraduate and postgraduate), I have financially supported myself by working in different environments that varied from retail shops to international exhibitions where I gained excellent customer service skills, as well as problem-solving and supervisory skills. This last year I juggled three jobs and my Masters’ assignments, and I pride myself on my ability in having perfectly managed my time and successfully completed my tasks by the deadline.

My recent volunteer experience as Artist Liaison—during the Greenwich+Docklands International Festival of performative arts—has increased my interest and my passion for working with artists. I have fully enjoyed my time spent in assisting the group of artists I was in charge of, to the extent that I ended up participating in their performances as well, while engaging with the audience. Of course, I also have supported the Festival Administrator and Production Manager in order to assure that the events were running smoothly.

Moreover, I have co-curated an exhibition held at my University and I have previously worked as Office Assistant and Collaborator at a luxury estate agency, where I developed and improved my administrative and organisational skills. I liaised with new clients, wrote and advertised new listings in English, Italian and French and managed the accounting of the company (I hold a diploma in Business Administration).

Living alone and unfortunately not being able to count on family support, the paid role as xx at the XX would be the perfect catalyst for me to kick start my career in the arts and culture sector. A first step towards fulfilling a dream for which I have worked hard and that kept me going even during the most difficult moments. But this role would not only benefit me financially and professionally. I sincerely believe in the organisation’s values of integrity, equality, and generosity, and I fully share the aim of working towards the support of artists and the promotion of artistic practices as an important cultural component of our society.

Should you wish to offer me the position, I would not hesitate to bring in my passion, my knowledge, and my previous work experience to efficiently carry out the administrative and liaising tasks that the R&A Assistant role entails, ensuring my reliability and flexibility in supporting both the artists and the organisation.

Please find attached my cv, which expands on my past job experiences, skills, and education. Thank you for taking time to consider my application and I look forward to hearing from you.