Need opinion about my new poem,please..

My Time

Gasp the air I breathe,

Beauty could I resist in my dream,

Friendly faces, flowing talks to people I’ve been with,

Tiresome, sadness and anger now turn to beam,

Colour my sanity in pink, purple and blue,

Rest a soul dwelling with broken heart,

Worries and fears eased oh…by you,

Keep a drop of hope and a dot of faith up high though hard,

March of people from Little India to Orchard Road,

Romance and friendship along Clark Quay and Marina Bay,

A dollar or two from Somerset to Dhobi Ghaut,

Bravery come and wave goodbye,

Feeling lucky I found an Orange Lantern on my way,

“Vietnam” written underneath the cover,

I bring it on Saturday and Sunday,

To such tasteful feast no one would pass it over,

Cheers the sweet of friendship in a glass of Singapore sling,

Tiger and Organic Beers for our short night companion,

Echoes our laugh in a tunnel… amazed when a musician sing,

Now, I shall leave it all good and carry the story on.