NEED LOTS HELP WITH THESE 5 sentences PLEASE?

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Could you please help me correct these sentences please?

1 With every step she takes, I come closer to winning./everytime she takes a step I come closer to winning.
2 He was so different at the beginning of the night from the end of the night./There was a big difference between the beginning of the night and the end.
3 You won't be as tired if you sleep from 8pm to 5am as if you sleep/slept from 12am to 9am.
4 I suspect only John would pursue a relationship with a(s) large an age difference as the one they sported.
5 What side of the train do you get off from/on?

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Fandorin · Accepted Answer

alc24Could you please help me correct these sentences please?
1 With every step she takes, I come closer to winning./everytime she takes a step I come closer to winning. Every step she takes brings me closer to the winning.
2 He was so different at the beginning of the night from the end of the night./There was a big difference between the beginning of the night and the end. There are different sentences you're trying to compare. His attitude was oil and vinegar between sunset and dawn/ There was a world's difference between dawn and sunset.
3 You won't be as tired if you sleep from 8pm to 5am as if you sleep/slept from 12am to 9am.
You will not be that tired if sleeping from 8 p.m. to 5 p.m. insted of from 12 a.m. to 9a.m.
4 I suspect only John would pursue a relationship with a(s) large an age difference as the one they sported. I suspect only John would pursue relationships with such age's difference as they sported.
5 What side of the train do you get off from/on? What side of the train did you alight?

CalifJim · Answer

1 With every step she takes, I come closer to winning. OK.
/~~everytime~~ Every time she takes a step I come closer to winning. OK.
2 He was so different at the beginning of the night from the end of the night. OK but not idiomatic. He was very different at the end of the night (compared to the beginning).

/There was a big difference between the beginning of the night and the end. OK.
3 You won't be as tired if you sleep from 8pm to 5am as if you sleep~~/slept~~ from 12am to 9am. OK.
4 I suspect only John would pursue a relationship with a(s) large an age difference as the one they sported. Woo! 'sported'!?

What? Not idiomatic.
There's quite a large age difference between them. I suspect only John would pursue a relationship like that.
5 What side of the train do you get off from/on? Both OK. I use on.

You like to invent sentences that have a lot more complicated logic than most native speakers would use in a single sentence. We typically split the thought into two or more sentences to keep things simpler.

CJ

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