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Market Posted 20 years ago
Grammar
need help with some phrases.( grammaticaly correct or not??)
this one i'm having a hard time with.
1. The waterwheel starts turning, powering the machine.
(is that one ok? i'm just not sure because it finishes with a verb , then starts with a verb.)
2. Lanterns in the corners of the room roar to life with bright flames.
alternatives to the phrases could be.
1. The waterwheel starts turning. the maching awakes.
2. Lanterns in the corners of the room roar to life with bright flames, lighting the room in a orange glow.
what are your thoughts thanks.
1. The waterwheel starts turning, powering the machine.
(is that one ok? i'm just not sure because it finishes with a verb , then starts with a verb.)
2. Lanterns in the corners of the room roar to life with bright flames.
alternatives to the phrases could be.
1. The waterwheel starts turning. the maching awakes.
2. Lanterns in the corners of the room roar to life with bright flames, lighting the room in a orange glow.
what are your thoughts thanks.
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Hi Market, Welcome to the Forum. Your sentences are OK grammatically. Your alternatives are certainly more stylish and literary.
- Hi Market, Welcome to the Forum.
- Your sentences are OK grammatically.
- Your alternatives are certainly more stylish and literary.
- 1.
- The waterwheel starts turning, powering the machine.
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Hi Market,
Welcome to the Forum. Your sentences are OK grammatically. Your alternatives are certainly more stylish and literary.
1. The waterwheel starts turning, powering the machine.
(is that one ok? i'm just not sure because it finishes with a verb , then starts with a verb.)
Welcome to the Forum. Your sentences are OK grammatically. Your alternatives are certainly more stylish and literary.
1. The waterwheel starts turning, powering the machine.
(is that one ok? i'm just not sure because it finishes with a verb , then starts with a verb.)
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yeah, thanks for your help. lol...i should of prof read before posting. i wrote: maching instead of machine... lol.
and thanks for the last phrare cause , i didn't like the the word "room" appeared twice. it flows very nicely now thanks.
and thanks for the last phrare cause , i didn't like the the word "room" appeared twice. it flows very nicely now thanks.
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need an opinion from someone. which phrases is clearer. basicaly i want a stone slab to drob down and close the doorway but with enough time for people to slip through. not too slow but not too fast either.
1. He hits into the statue, triggering a stone slab slowly descending from the doorway.
2. He hits into statue, triggering a stone slab slowly closing down on the doorwa
1. He hits into the statue, triggering a stone slab slowly descending from the doorway.
2. He hits into statue, triggering a stone slab slowly closing down on the doorwa
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Hi,
My main coment is that it sounds odd and wrong to say He hits into the statue. You need to say it another way.
Clive
My main coment is that it sounds odd and wrong to say He hits into the statue. You need to say it another way.
Clive
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but his the image of the closing door , work?
i could change it to : He verbs againsts the statue. or He verbs into the statue.
slams , stumbles into, runs into, falls ,
i could change it to : He verbs againsts the statue. or He verbs into the statue.
slams , stumbles into, runs into, falls ,
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Hi,
but is the image of the closing door , work? Yes
i could change it to : He verbs againsts the statue. or He verbs into the statue.
slams , stumbles into, runs into, falls ,
These ideas are OK.
Clive
but is the image of the closing door , work? Yes
i could change it to : He verbs againsts the statue. or He verbs into the statue.
slams , stumbles into, runs into, falls ,
These ideas are OK.
Clive
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