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Agus Yunanto Posted 14 years ago
Grammar

need help with prologue

Hello guys, I made a prolouge for a game story that have some kind of pokemon theme..please check my grammar error, thanks Emotion: smile

In this world there are creatures who loves to fight, they battle each other to be the best fighter. But they can't battle without command and strategy , it's the job of people whose called commander to command them and train them to be the best monster/fighter. Now can you lead your monsters to victory?
  

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Hello Agus Yunanto, I am just a fan of Pokemon, so I decided to reply this post when I came accross it. It seems to be a good pologue. There are just some things that need to be corrected to make your writing better: In this world , there are creature s who loves love to fight, they battle each other to be the best fighter s .

  • Hello Agus Yunanto, I am just a fan of Pokemon, so I decided to reply this post when I came accross it.
  • It seems to be a good pologue.
  • There are just some things that need to be corrected to make your writing better: In this world , there are creature s who loves love to fight, they battle each other to be the best fighter s .
  • But they can't battle without command and strategy .
  • ) it's Commanding fighters and making strategies are the jobs of people whose called commander s .
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Hello Agus Yunanto,
I am just a fan of Pokemon, so I decided to reply this post when I came accross it. Emotion: smile It seems to be a good p
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Thanks Gigilian! It really seems better..
I need to improve my grammars..hope this forum could help me out Emotion: happy
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You're very welcome Emotion: smile Are you a fan of Pokemon? I love Pokemon

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