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Anonymous Posted 11 years ago
Letter Writing
Need help with my motivation letter
I have just finished writing my motivation letter and I would be glad if you could check it. Please, make your correction, comments, advice. I want to make my letter good as much as possible! Thank you!
When I was in the fourth grade there was no electricity for most of the nights. Since I really loved studying and I do now, I had to study with the hand light. One night the light’s battery went dead, it was late at night and the shops were closed. I lit the candle and continued studying until I felt a burning smell. I realized that my hair (just near the forehead) was burnt. That night, I decided to become a successful electrical engineer. To achieve this goal, I needed to work hard. I was able to make my way to xxx school, the best high school in xxx. Eventually I graduated with 95 % average marks as the most talented student.
Afterwards, I entered in a very competitive process, Kankor. xxxxxx nationwide university entrance exam. Each year more than 240,000 students participate in Kankor examination. When I was preparing for the test, only 150 applicants could get accepted to the engineering faculty of xxxxx University, the most prestigious university in xxxxx. I was very confident and said to myself even if they pick only two people I will be one of them. Fortunately, I got 330 from 360 which is a very high number and admitted in engineering faculty to continue my higher education.
University was the place where I could achieve the biggest goal of life. To be very successful in my future career I determined to be extremely diligent. I remember staying up late at night, sometimes until two in the morning. Besides studying the subjects from the university curriculum I studied additional materials that I found from the internet, libraries or from my friends. During my undergraduate studies I enjoyed learning all subjects particularly Circuit Analysis, Wiring Design, Power system and Energy Conversion. However, in the last semester the subject that really draw my attention was renewable energy. My interest for this subject was this much that I’d like to pursue a master’s degree in it.
When I was in the fourth grade there was no electricity for most of the nights. Since I really loved studying and I do now, I had to study with the hand light. One night the light’s battery went dead, it was late at night and the shops were closed. I lit the candle and continued studying until I felt a burning smell. I realized that my hair (just near the forehead) was burnt. That night, I decided to become a successful electrical engineer. To achieve this goal, I needed to work hard. I was able to make my way to xxx school, the best high school in xxx. Eventually I graduated with 95 % average marks as the most talented student.
Afterwards, I entered in a very competitive process, Kankor. xxxxxx nationwide university entrance exam. Each year more than 240,000 students participate in Kankor examination. When I was preparing for the test, only 150 applicants could get accepted to the engineering faculty of xxxxx University, the most prestigious university in xxxxx. I was very confident and said to myself even if they pick only two people I will be one of them. Fortunately, I got 330 from 360 which is a very high number and admitted in engineering faculty to continue my higher education.
University was the place where I could achieve the biggest goal of life. To be very successful in my future career I determined to be extremely diligent. I remember staying up late at night, sometimes until two in the morning. Besides studying the subjects from the university curriculum I studied additional materials that I found from the internet, libraries or from my friends. During my undergraduate studies I enjoyed learning all subjects particularly Circuit Analysis, Wiring Design, Power system and Energy Conversion. However, in the last semester the subject that really draw my attention was renewable energy. My interest for this subject was this much that I’d like to pursue a master’s degree in it.
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You should separate your text into sentences and paragraphs. Doing so would make it much easier to read. Once you have, you can post it here again and await another reply.
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When I was in the fourth grade there was no electricity for most of the nights. Since I really loved studying and I still do now, I had to study with the aid of a hand flashlight. One night the light’s battery went dead. It was late at night and the shops were closed. I lit the a candle and continued s
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