Need help with my cover letter, please!

Dear all, I am a graduated student from Hong Kong, and currently looking for a job in the finance or banking industry. However, I am not confident with my English writing with the cover letter, and I knew there must be grammar mistakes somewhere or some chi-english style expression. And I am hoping someone in this forum could help me improve it, like making some changes with the wordings or tell me how should I modify the letter. And thank you in advance.

Dear Sir / Madam,



Application for Business Analyst





My education in Master of Finance and my fluency in English, as well as my strong analytical mind parallel the requirements of Business Analyst. I have recently graduated from Hong Kong Polytechnic University, and I am eager to put my education to work for Regus.



As an intern research assistant with Dalian Commodity Exchange in China, a valuable source of experience to strengthen my analytical ability and research skills. In the Product Research Department, I took the opportunity to expand my knowledge of commodity futures, while conducted research and analysis that focused on the sensitivity of financial future trading to the contract size design. Being a warehouse supervisor in previous employment, I demonstrated effective leadership and organizational skills by managing a team of 5 and maintaining the warehouse operation in an efficient manner.



Being a Business Analyst that is getting my foot in the door at the Regus is the role I want to pursue, as this the opportunity to enhance my business acumen in the real world of business, a profession to make the best use of my knowledge and skills, in an effort to generate positive impact on the company's business. As a result of my keen interest in this profession, I have made progress toward the Chartered Financial Analyst (CFA) designation for further professional growth.



I am enthusiastic about a career in Regus and am confident that I have the aptitudes, attributes and tenacity to excel in this position. I would like to have the opportunity to meeting with you and discuss my suitability.



Thank you for your time and consideration.



Yours Faithfully,