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Remig Posted 15 years ago
Letter Writing

Need help with motivation letter

Dear all,

I am writing motivation letter for MA in UK. I would appreciate if someone can comment on my English as well as on the structure of motivation letter. Thank you in advance!



I appreciate this opportunity to provide further information in support of my application for Master in Tourism Management at the University of Westminster.

I completed bachelor‘s degree in Comparitive Asian Studies (Japanese major) from X University in 2010. I have studied various aspects of Asian culture, including Japanese and Chinese languages, history, philosophy, religion and music. Also I recieved a scholarship to study for half of the year in Tsukuba University, Japan. There I improved my knowledge in Japanese language as well as in various cross-cultural issues. I was awarded high grades in all of my courses and recieved a highest grade for my bachelor thesis called „X“. I am currently working as a teacher assistant in X School. Moreover, I am teaching Japanese language for beginners at X University.

I decided to pursue my studies in tourism management due to my interest in different cultures and tourism sector. Taking into consideration that numbers of tourists from Asia in Europe are constantly growing, it is important to have knowledge of cross-cultural understanding. Therefore, I believe that the linguistic and educational profile that I acquired will be an important asset for my realization in the field of tourism management.

I wish to develop knowledge and skills in tourism management so I could work in this sector. Thus it is my strong belief that a degree from University of Westminster can help me to achieve my goal of becoming an expert in the field of tourism.

Thank you so much for your consideration and I am looking forward to your reply.
  

Top answer

Hi remig; Welcome to the Forums! I have made some suggestions for your letter. These "motivation letters" are a very important component of an application.

  • Hi remig; Welcome to the Forums!
  • I have made some suggestions for your letter.
  • These "motivation letters" are a very important component of an application.
  • A good motivation letter should add information about you as a person that is not on the formal application forms.
  • If you just repeat this information in your letter, you are wasting the reader's time.
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Hi remig;
Welcome to the Forums!
I have made some suggestions for your letter. These "motivation letters" are a very important component of an application. A good motivation letter should add information about you as a person that is not on the formal application forms. If you just repeat this information in your letter, you are wasting the reader's time.

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Thank you for the reply! I don't feel confident as it is my first time to write such kind of letter. This is my revised version. Should I write about my hobbies or my personality? I am not sure if it's important. I would appreciate any comments.





I wish to apply to the Masters of Tourism Management at University of Westminster for the 2011 autumn term. I wish to dev
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Hi remig;

Should I write about my hobbies or my personality? Yes. Activities and interests outside academia (especially volunteering and community work) indicate a well-rounded person. The school might be concerned about an applicant's ability to adapt to a new environment, so your positive experiences as an exchange student would be a good subject to include. Universities are always
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Thank you so much. I think maybe I wrote too much about myself Emotion: smile It was really helpful to get comments so I can improve. But I am not
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Try to catch the reader's attention in your first paragraph, introducing ideas that you devleop later, for example:

I wish to apply to the Masters of Tourism Management at University of Westminster for the 2011 autumn term. I wish to develop knowledge and skills in tourism management to be able to lead the future development of tourism in my country and be a specialist in catering t
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It really sounds much better. Thank you! Sometimes it's difficult to express my thoughts when English is not my native language. Also I added a paragraph about my hobbies and personality. Is my letter overall okey?

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