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How new technology ruins our children childhood
In my opinion new technology isn’t good at all for kids of a young age. It ruins their childhood, ability to be creative, their imagination is gone. The only thing kids want for birthdays or Christmas is new toy. But not a toy to play, most of the time it’s a new technology toy, either new iPod (even though he/she has an older version) iPad, laptop, tablet. I could go on and on and on. Basically every few months there is something new on the market. I can get that. It’s money for the company but for kids. Nowadays kids doesn’t want to play outside, they doesn’t really want to play inside either. Excluding video games. It’s actually my personal experience from my nieces and nephews. The only thing they want to do are the video games, or ipads, or ipods (whatever has an apple sign to be honest). They don’t like to play outside any more. Why would they? They can have fun at home with their video games and technology toys. If you ask them to play with each other? They are so lost that they don’t know what to do and eventually finishing with watching TV. They have no imagination what’s so ever. There are also parents that have to find the game for their kids or play with them to protect them from video games. I feel bad that this is what we have now. I remember when I was 10, I could off spend hours and hours outside. I barely watched TV because the most fun I could have was to play outside with my friends. Today if you won’t kick your kids outside to play they won’t go. Which is very sad. So one of my nieces first thing in the morning when she wakes up she turns her iPad on to “Face Time” (kind of like Skype) with her friend from her class, and she talks to her while getting ready to school. Isn’t that crazy? But can we really blame kids for that?? Not really. It is not them who buys video games, ipads, and ipods. It is the parents who does that. Nowadays everybody is busy with their life’s, so lots of parents use technology as a tool to make their kids busy so they don’t have to give much time to them . What happened with the books reading?? Parents are too busy to do so, so they turn on TV or buy new video game. It is bad where our world is going with this, it is not going in a good way that’s for sure. What these kids will become?? What are they going to be in the future?? Video games maniacs?? Maybe. Who knows? Hopefully this new technology mania will turn around in a different direction.