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Anonymous Posted 15 years ago
Grammar
Need help with grammar in letter
My boss wanted me to proofread his letter. It's about bonus pay for extra education for an employee. The first paragraph is basically just saying "this letter is in response to your request for an education bonus for Ms. Sanders. Regarding this, the law says blah blah blah."
The first sentence of the second paragraph is:
"While it is an educational achievement for Ms. Sanders, this office does not find that it is directly relevant to the performance of her job."
Does the first "it" need to be more specific? Or not?
The first sentence of the second paragraph is:
"While it is an educational achievement for Ms. Sanders, this office does not find that it is directly relevant to the performance of her job."
Does the first "it" need to be more specific? Or not?
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From what you have given us, it seems that 'it' refers to the bonus, but that may be an unfair assessment. I would have to see the complete text leading up to this sentence.
- From what you have given us, it seems that 'it' refers to the bonus, but that may be an unfair assessment.
- I would have to see the complete text leading up to this sentence.
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From what you have given us, it seems that 'it' refers to the bonus, but that may be an unfair assessment. I would have to see the complete text leading up to this sentence.
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"It" is referring to the education received (the college degree or whatever). Should the first "it" in that sentence be more specific? Should it say "college degree" instead of "it?"
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You still have not given me the actual text, so I cannot comment further. You may fictionalize the proper nouns, of course.
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