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Mizanur Posted 12 years ago
Letter Writing
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I would be grateful if you check the grammar and punctuation. thanks a lot.
I did some research on website of graduate school of XX. I also went through the profile of Ph.D. candidates and found that your supervised students’ research fields have a good matching to my research interest and prior background.
MS Yuki, a PHD candidate, is conducting research on poverty in a developing country, Ghana. In the similar vein, I selected country B for my case studies research while I was writing my thesis. Another PhD student, Tamer, who is also under your supervision, is working on civil society and explores the dynamics between civil society organizations & donor funding and ultimately its impacts on the public policy in conflict ridden area. My areas of interests are NGOs, donor agencies from developing country perspective. It is appears to me that my background and research interest. I am very much interested to continue my further studies under your supervision.
I was initially thinking about PhD and then decided to for Master’s in xx. Question may come in your mind that why I am pursuing another Master’s since I have it already. My previous master’s is in public administration. My previous Master’s programme and the thesis I submitted was entirely followed qualitative research approach. I am extremely eager to learn the use of quantitative method in data collection and analysis along with qualitative methods. The courses offered by Master of XX are another reason for applying master’s programme. Here I am not going for detail discussion, it might prolong the email.
Medium of instruction of my previous study was in English, but my institution is not on the exemption list. I have recently taken up the IELTS test and my score was XX. If you permit me I will send my details CV with language certificate and academic transcript for your kind perusal.
I did some research on website of graduate school of XX. I also went through the profile of Ph.D. candidates and found that your supervised students’ research fields have a good matching to my research interest and prior background.
MS Yuki, a PHD candidate, is conducting research on poverty in a developing country, Ghana. In the similar vein, I selected country B for my case studies research while I was writing my thesis. Another PhD student, Tamer, who is also under your supervision, is working on civil society and explores the dynamics between civil society organizations & donor funding and ultimately its impacts on the public policy in conflict ridden area. My areas of interests are NGOs, donor agencies from developing country perspective. It is appears to me that my background and research interest. I am very much interested to continue my further studies under your supervision.
I was initially thinking about PhD and then decided to for Master’s in xx. Question may come in your mind that why I am pursuing another Master’s since I have it already. My previous master’s is in public administration. My previous Master’s programme and the thesis I submitted was entirely followed qualitative research approach. I am extremely eager to learn the use of quantitative method in data collection and analysis along with qualitative methods. The courses offered by Master of XX are another reason for applying master’s programme. Here I am not going for detail discussion, it might prolong the email.
Medium of instruction of my previous study was in English, but my institution is not on the exemption list. I have recently taken up the IELTS test and my score was XX. If you permit me I will send my details CV with language certificate and academic transcript for your kind perusal.
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I would make some suggestions on the organization and logical flow but you did not ask for that. These suggestions are limited only to grammar. I did some research on the website of the graduate school of XX.
- I would make some suggestions on the organization and logical flow but you did not ask for that.
- These suggestions are limited only to grammar.
- I did some research on the website of the graduate school of XX.
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- candidates and found that the your supervised students’ areas of research of the students you supervise fields have a good match to my research interest s and prior background.
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I would make some suggestions on the organization and logical flow but you did not ask for that.
These suggestions are limited only to grammar.
I did some research on the website of the graduate school of XX. I also went through the profiles of the Ph.D. candidates and found that theyour supervised students’ areas of research o
These suggestions are limited only to grammar.
I did some research on the website of the graduate school of XX. I also went through the profiles of the Ph.D. candidates and found that the
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@Alphecca Stars, You were saying about organization and logical flow. Actually I did not ask for that, I thought I could be too much to ask for. If you help me to re-organize the passage, I will be grateful.
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MizanurYou were saying about organization and logical flow.This seems a better flow if ideas:
First briefly state your goals, interests and ambitions.
Second say how this school and its current students are doing research in the same areas that you are interested in.
Third go into a bit more detail on the particular thesis or subject matter.a
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