Need help to CORRECT SENTENCE STYLE, WORD CHOICE, GRAMMATICAL SENTENCE and PUNCTUATION ERRORS

CORRECT THE FOLLOWING SENTENCES THAT HAVE SENTENCE STYLE, WORD CHOICE, GRAMMATICAL SENTENCE and PUNCTUATION ERRORS, AND TELL WHAT RULE OF WRITING YOU ARE ADDRESSING. (The first one is done for you.)

1. Police dogs are used for finding lost children, tracking criminals, and the detection of bombs and illegal drugs. detecting (parallel structure)


2. It is easier to sustain an exercise program than starting one.



3. The old Marlboro ads depicted a man on a horse smoking a cigarette. (



4. Dyslexia is when people have a learning disorder that impairs reading ability.



5. The first basic, important, essential law that governs the field of economics is self-interest. (Redundancies)



6. A strange sound was made in the willow tree by the monkey that had escaped from the zoo.

The monkey escaped from the zoo and is in the willow tree making a strange sound.



7. Passengers should endeavor to finalize the customs declaration form prior to exiting the aircraft. complete (Appropriate/pretentious language)



8. Many people take for granite that public libraries half up-to-date networked computer systems. granted; have (?)



9. Shelters for teenage runaways (offer/offers) a wide variety of services.

10. Our church has all the latest technology, even a close-circuit television. including (?)



11. Every presidential candidate must appeal to a wide variety of ethnic and social groups if they want to win the election.



12. Listening to the CD her sister had sent her, Mia was overcome with a mix of emotions. Happiness, homesickness, nostalgia.



13. Wind power for the home is a supplementary source of energy, it can be combined with electricity, gas, or solar energy.



14. Although she was not in combat, Mary Walker, then in her (thirties / thirty’s), served in the Union army. She became the first woman to receive the Medal of Honor, the (military’s/ militarys’) highest-ranking medal. She fought for a constitutional amendment to allow women to vote. Congress finally passed the Nineteenth Amendment in 1920. Unfortunately, Mary Walker died before (its / it’s) adoption.

Thirty year old Mary Walker served in the Union Army, but she was never in combat. She was the first woman to receive the military’s highest ranking Medal of Honor. She fought for a constitutional amendment to allow women to vote. Unfortunately, Mary Walker died before Congress passed the Nineteenth Amendment in 1920.

Any help will be appriciated!