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Anonymous Posted 18 years ago
Letter Writing

need help to correct my motivation letter!!

Hello!
I want to study in Stockholm. It seems imposible, but maybe I can get it. I need to have a very correct English. If you see any mistake, please tell me!

Thanks!!

Barcelona, 8th October 2008

Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is Elsa A. and I am finishing my studies of Nuclear Engineering at the Univeristy X.

I am planning to write my master thesis from February 2009 to July 2009 and I am very interested in going to University Y in this period as an exchange student. I have always wanted to incorporate an international experience into my degree; however, the moment has not been right until now. Sweden is a very exciting country and your university is fortunately part of the European Nuclear Education Network. Thus, this exchange at University Y would additionally give me the possibility of achieving the European Master of Science in Nuclear Engineering.

I am now in my sixth year of study. I am a really eager person and I have always been complementing my degree studies with other activities. I worked for a semester as stipend supporting work teams, and it was a very positive experience. I have a strong academic background. I got a bronze medal for an official national mathematics contest for young students. I have been learning German for two years, which was a really enjoyable and interesting experience since day one.

I describe myself as a social, open-minded and enterprising person. Furthermore, I am diplomatic and serious. I can adapt easily to a new context and I look forward to face a real international experience. I spent two summers living abroad in Berlin, a city whose culture, freedom, and novelty I deeply appreciate. Not far from what I expect to find in Stockholm. I am an active member of the cinema association in my home university, and I am the leader of a music band. I know how to listen.

Sweden captivated me because of its climate and its people. Barcelona is a very international city, and I had the opportunity to meet many Swedish. Some of them introduced me to the traditions and culture of your country and they are now close friends. Besides that, I feel very attracted to Scandinavia, and I want to experiment the special features of its climate and rhythm.

Thank you very much for considering my request. I feel that spending a semester at University Y would give unique strength to my final step of my degree, and be an extraordinary personal experience. I look forward to your positive response.

Sincerely yours,

Elsa de Alfonso
  

Top answer

Sweden is a very exciting country and your university is fortunately a part of the European Nuclear Education Network. I worked for a semester as stipend supporting work teams , and it was a very positive experience. What exactly did you mean?

  • Sweden is a very exciting country and your university is fortunately a part of the European Nuclear Education Network.
  • I worked for a semester as stipend supporting work teams , and it was a very positive experience.
  • What exactly did you mean?
  • I have been learning German for two years, which was a truly enjoyable and interesting experience since the first day .
  • I would describe myself as a social, open-minded and enterprising person.
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Sweden is a very exciting country and your university is fortunately a part of the European Nuclear Education Network.

I worked for a semester as stipend supporting work teams, and it was a very positive experience. What exactly did you mean?

I have been learning German for two years, which was a truly enjoyable and interesting experience since
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thank you! it was helpful! I already sent it!

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