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IN ONE PARAGRAPH PROOF THAT GEORGE AND LINNIE ARE TRUE FRIENDS.	A true friend sticks with you through the good and the bad times. George and Linnie dream is friendship.  Friendship plays a major role in the book "Of Mice and Men". Because the dream is so extraordinary, their companionship was special. Although, they are more characters in the novel such as Candy, Slim, Carlson, and Crooks, but their closeness wasn't like George and Linnie.  Firstly, Lennie isolated from other men on the ranch because of his mental disability, which does not allow him to participate in any social activities. George being a true friend always there for Linnie, for example he constant went to the bunk house and check if he was okay. But sometimes Linnie didn't listen. George threatening to leave him, but he couldn't because he loves and cares for him. Furthermore, when Lennie accidentally kills Curley's wife, George forced to shoot him, because he knew that it was more humane to end Lennie's life quickly, rather than Curley who wanted revenge might not be as merciful and quick. Despite everyone's suspicion, the friendship between George and Lennie remains solid.

Mister Micawber · Accepted Answer

I have underlined some problem areas:

IN ONE PARAGRAPH PROOF THAT GEORGE AND LINNIE ARE TRUE FRIENDS.

A true friend sticks with you through the good and the bad times. George and Linnie dream is friendship. Friendship plays a major role in the book "Of Mice and Men". Because the dream [Wrong word choice– it is not a dream] is so extraordinary, their companionship was special. Although, they are more characters in the novel such as Candy, Slim, Carlson, and Crooks, ~~but~~ their closeness wasn't like George and Linnie. Firstly, Lennie isolated from other men on the ranch because of his mental disability, which does not allow him to participate in any social activities. George being a true friend always there for Linnie, for example he constant went to the bunk house and check if he was okay. But sometimes Linnie didn't listen. George threatening to leave him, but he couldn't because he loves and cares for him. Furthermore, when Lennie accidentally kills Curley's wife, George forced to shoot him, because he knew that it was more humane to end Lennie's life quickly, rather than Curley who wanted revenge might not be as merciful and quick. Despite everyone's suspicion, the friendship between George and Lennie remains solid.

Also, your verb tenses are confused. You must decide whether you are telling this in present or past tense, and then be consistent.

Jennifermk · Answer

THANK YOU VERY MUCH. I DID SOME CORRECTIONS - WHAT DO YOU THINK ABOUT THIS ONE?

A true friend sticks with you through the good and the bad times. The friendship Lennie and George had in Of Mice and Men was incomparable to most friendships today.

They were two very different people who has nothing in common but bond together as friends. Although, they were more characters in the novel such as Candy, Slim, Carlson, and Crooks, their closeness wasn’t like George and Lennie. There were sometimes Lennie won’t listen to what George said, that ****** him off. Despite that George's impatience and annoyance with Lennie he always went to the bunk house to see if he was okay. Because of Lennie mental disability, he did not participate in any social activities at the ranch. Furthermore, after Lennie accidentally kills Curley's wife. George knew their dream of owning a farm was shattered. As a result, George shot and killed Lennie. He wants to save him from a painful death. Because he could die terrible death by Curley.

Jennifermk · Answer

I copied here again.

A true friend sticks with you through the good and the bad times. The friendship Lennie and George had in Of Mice and Men was incomparable to most friendships today.
They were two very different people who has nothing in common but bond together as friends. Although, they were more characters in the novel such as Candy, Slim, Carlson, and Crooks, their closeness wasn't like George and Lennie. There were sometimes Lennie won't listen to what George said, that ****** him off. Despite that George's impatience and annoyance with Lennie he always went to the bunk house to see if he was okay. Because of Lennie mental disability, he did not participate in any social activities at the ranch. Furthermore, after Lennie accidentally kills Curley's wife. George knew their dream of owning a farm was shattered. As a result, George shot and killed Lennie. He wants to save him from a painful death. Because he could die terrible death by Curley.

Mister Micawber · Answer

A true friend sticks with you through the good and the bad times. The friendship Lennie and George had in Of Mice and Men was ~~incomparable to~~ [Not true– they can easily be compared; choose a different phrase] most friendships today.

They were two very different people who ~~has nothing in common but~~ bonded ~~together as friends~~. ~~Although, they were more characters in the novel such as Candy, Slim, Carlson, and Crooks,~~ The closeness of the other characters in the book wasn't like George and Lennie. ~~There were~~ Sometimes Lennie wouldn't listen to what George said~~, that *** him off~~. Despite George's impatience and annoyance with Lennie, he always went to the bunkhouse to see if he was okay. Because of Lennie's mental disability, he did not participate in any social activities at the ranch. Furthermore, after Lennie accidentally killed Curley's wife, George knew their dream of owning a farm was shattered. As a result, George shot and killed Lennie. He wanted to save him from a painful death at Curley's hands.

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