Need help correcting an application

Hi!
I am 16 year old girl from Norway, and I am about to apply for school in the US next year. Therefore I need some help; I need someone to go through my application and just help me. It is a one A4 page with several paragraphs. I would definitely not claim that this is a piece of very complicated English, therefore I suppose it would be an easy match for you!

I do not want to post it here for reasons such as... well, they might search for similar documents and find it. Whoever wants to fix it; send me your email in a private message and I will send the document as quickly as possible.

I really hope that someone want to help me with this. It would be highly appreciated.