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Dear Mountain hiker, I hope you can make my paragraph better than this.

The first drawing of a white shirt by Lisa Anderson was a quality drawing with the value of interior and exterior light. First, it strong and direct light as we might experience out of doors on a sunny day. The contrast went through the whole picture of shirt created a soft light and the dark shadow expanded was such a beautiful scene. This art was a black and white color, but it effect is more powerful as the colorful drawing too. The shirt was interacted with the light created an interesting value with its exterior and interior shadow. The quality of line drawing in this drawing is great. Symmetrically lines through out the picture show a good balance and was established a good texture at its background. It is hard to believe that this shirt was a drawing art while its quality is a real photo of a white shirt instead.

MrPedantic · Accepted Answer

Hello Luve,

I don't think MountainHiker's here today, so I hope you'll accept my version. In some places, I'm not quite sure of your meaning, so have had to guess:

The first drawing of a white shirt by Lisa Anderson was of a high quality, especially in its depiction of interior and exterior light. First, it showed strong, direct light, as we might experience it out of doors on a sunny day. The contrast in the picture between the soft light of the shirt and the dark shadow that surrounded it made a beautiful scene. This work was in black and white, but its effect was more powerful than a drawing in colour.

The shirt as it interacted with the light created an interesting value, with its exterior and interior shadow. The quality of line drawing in this drawing was excellent. Symmetrical lines throughout the picture showed a good balance, and established a good texture in the background.

It is hard to believe that this was a drawing of a shirt. Its quality was rather that of a real photograph of a white shirt.

MrP

Luve · Answer

It look great, Thanks for your time.
If you don't mind looking at this paragraph that continued from the previous one above.

Again, thank for your big help

The second drawing is a combination of three different pictures by Lisa Anderson, a great drawing that leads me to describe in this report. The variety of textures and lights were a major rule in making this drawing outstanding. The first top of this picture is a garden tool with its shadow. It has a symmetrical balance achieves by the tool and its shadow, created by the light, make the texture of this interesting. It also has a good value of the image background that came from the light. The artist used a light and value in this drawing to make it in to a quality drawing. Another picture, which located in the right bottom corner of the picture, has a high contrast, good quality, and variety of lines. An effect of a strong light coming across the drawing from the right side to the left dramatically interplays of light and dark values. The drawing at the far left corner is also full of lines quality. It created a good form of a tree breach and a shark. The combination of these three pictures in one drawing displays a variety in all pictures, but they are all have a unique quality.

MrPedantic · Answer

Here you go, Luve:

The second drawing is a combination of three different pictures by Lisa Anderson, and is a great piece of work. The variety of textures and lights plays a major part in making this drawing outstanding. At the top of the picture is a garden tool with its shadow. The symmetrical balance achieved by the tool and its shadow make the texture of this picture interesting. It also has good light values in the background, which make it a high quality drawing. Another picture is located in the right bottom corner of the picture, and has high contrast, good quality, and variety of lines. The effect of strong light coming across the drawing from the right side to the left creates dramatic interplays of light and dark values. The drawing at the far left corner also has interesting linear qualities. The composition consists of a tree stump and a shark. The combination of these three pictures in one drawing gives an impression of great variety; each picture has a unique quality.

I've had to guess the meaning once or twice!

MrP

Luve · Answer

Thanks for your comments and revision.
I may need your help again over this passage. Please comment my paragraph as possible.

The second drawing is about a UFO. Acrylics are a particular effective combination for working with high contrast values in drawing. Since light plays such a profound role in the drawing, it makes sense that value is a primary means by which Marcus Hamilton creates moods and evokes feelings. The quality of the light from the UFO creates interesting visual effects in this drawing. Remarkably, Marcus Hamilton drawing seems to be in dark color and light, the drawing it self is lively and effectively. The selective of the color focus my attention on the symbolism and expressionism. “As a freelance illustrator, I enjoyed the freedom to explore different mediums and styles to achieve the most effective, illustrative solution for each assignment,” Marcus Hamilton said.

Perdurable · Answer

Here's my go, if that's okay!

The second piece depicts a UFO painted in acrylics; a particularly effective medium for high contrast work. Light plays a large role in this painting and so the artist utilises it, creating mood and evoking feelings. The UFO's light creates interesting visual effects and, remarkably, Hamilton manages to use both dark colours and light together. The painting itself is lively as well as effective, while its choice of colour focuses attention onto the expressionism and the symbolism within the piece. "As a freelance illustrator," says Marcus Hamilton, "I enjoyed the freedom to explore different mediums and styles to achieve the most effective, illustrative solution for each assignment."

Gillott170 · Answer

0 Hi, I was doing a Google search and found your comments about an illustration that I did for Saturday Evening Post years ago. I was flattered by your comments about the use of light to evoke emotions from the viewer. I was curious as to where you had seen the UFO art. 02br
00It is gratifying to read positive, intelligent comments about the art, and I thank you. 0-

MrPedantic · Answer

0 Welcome to English Forums, gillott170! It's a pleasure to have you here with us. 02br
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00Is the picture in question to be seen online, by any chance? It would be interesting to see it, after luve's write-up! 02br
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Gillott170 · Answer

0 MrP: 02br
00The UFO painting was part of a retrospective exhibit recently at an Art Museum in Spartanburg, South Carolina. I thought perhaps luve might have been there for the reception, and was doing a write-up of the show. Here is the website that shows some of the pieces from the exhibit, but does not contain the "UFO" painting. I'll try to scan in a shot of the art and post ir later, so you'll know what luve was describing. 02br
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Gillott170 · Answer

0 Below is the url to view the "UFO" illustration that luve had mentioned. 02br
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MrPedantic · Answer

0 Thank you very much, gillott170! Now I can see what luve meant about the use of light. 02br
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00Did I understand the various write-ups correctly – that you've now taken over Dennis the Menace? 02br
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