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Namruuh Posted 22 years ago
Grammar
Need English grammar check
Can someone help me out with an English grammar check on the text below?
Thanx!
Does the sky seem different today?, what colour whould you say it is?
Do the same clouds pass us by over and over again or do they dissolve just after we took notice of them?
Why did the world change overnight?, or have I just been awaken?………..
(the use of the word awaken is critical, but I think the grammar is incorrect)
So here am I, standing at the crossroads, wondering which one to take but whatever my decision may be, this I know for certain; each one of them will lead me away from that safe and secure place that I called home for so long.
Imagine this; the perfect picture!
…….for I am blessed with a loving family that cared and provided for me all troughout the years.
They gave me the freedom to draw and paint our small, comfortable existence over and over again.
Precious hours made visible in soft pastels and gentle watercolours, telling tales of happiness and contentment……or so it seems.
Because somehow they never understood my dreams, caught in rich, dark oilpaint, shaped by the nervous and anxious strokes of my brush……how much longer must I wait?
I am their only one, their hope for the future, I can do no wrong.
My skin shows no marks or bruises that speak of disagreements.
My soul bares no signs of tresspassing, my eyes are not yet clouded by sadness or grief.
Somebody please show me the way out of this so called paradise!!!
Nothing ever happens to me, this is my life.
So maybe it’s time for me to start living it…..for real!
I am a blank canvas and my journey is just about to begin…………………
Thanx!
Does the sky seem different today?, what colour whould you say it is?
Do the same clouds pass us by over and over again or do they dissolve just after we took notice of them?
Why did the world change overnight?, or have I just been awaken?………..
(the use of the word awaken is critical, but I think the grammar is incorrect)
So here am I, standing at the crossroads, wondering which one to take but whatever my decision may be, this I know for certain; each one of them will lead me away from that safe and secure place that I called home for so long.
Imagine this; the perfect picture!
…….for I am blessed with a loving family that cared and provided for me all troughout the years.
They gave me the freedom to draw and paint our small, comfortable existence over and over again.
Precious hours made visible in soft pastels and gentle watercolours, telling tales of happiness and contentment……or so it seems.
Because somehow they never understood my dreams, caught in rich, dark oilpaint, shaped by the nervous and anxious strokes of my brush……how much longer must I wait?
I am their only one, their hope for the future, I can do no wrong.
My skin shows no marks or bruises that speak of disagreements.
My soul bares no signs of tresspassing, my eyes are not yet clouded by sadness or grief.
Somebody please show me the way out of this so called paradise!!!
Nothing ever happens to me, this is my life.
So maybe it’s time for me to start living it…..for real!
I am a blank canvas and my journey is just about to begin…………………
Top answer
)---- "Does the sky seem different today? What colour would you say it is? Do the same clouds pass us by over and over again or do they dissolve just after we take notice of them?
- )---- "Does the sky seem different today?
- What colour would you say it is?
- Do the same clouds pass us by over and over again or do they dissolve just after we take notice of them?
- Why has the world changed overnight?
- Or have I just been awakened?
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Here you go, Namruuh (keep away from all the dots, eh?)----
"Does the sky seem different today? What colour would you say it is?
Do the same clouds pass us by over and over again or do they dissolve just after we take notice of them?
Why has the world changed overnight? Or have I just been awakened?
So here am I, standing at the crossroads, wondering which one
"Does the sky seem different today? What colour would you say it is?
Do the same clouds pass us by over and over again or do they dissolve just after we take notice of them?
Why has the world changed overnight? Or have I just been awakened?
So here am I, standing at the crossroads, wondering which one
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Thanx a lot Mister Micawber, that was really fast! One question, though: you removed the word 'nervous' from the part 'shaped by the nervous and anxious strokes of my brush'.
Did you do that on purpose, or is the word 'nervous' not applicable to objects, only to persons?
Did you do that on purpose, or is the word 'nervous' not applicable to objects, only to persons?
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'Nervous' is too near to 'anxious' in meaning, Namruuh, so it appears redundant. Be careful in composition not to pack in too many adjectives; search rather for the perfect adjective, or-- even better-- for the perfect noun to express your meaning.
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