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Hi Teachers,Could you correct this paragraph please? The main idea is to use as  many quantity words as possible. The demostration is just the excuse.There’s a small demonstration in a London park. The demonstrators are protesting against the Conservative Party. There aren’t a lot of them; there are only some and a few policemen near them. There are also some reporters there; in fact, there are quite a few reporters. They are interviewing some demonstrators and a few cameramen are filming the demonstration. There are also some Japanese tourists taking pictures of it.Thanks in advance

Melon_soda · Accepted Answer

What you wrote is fine but I'm going to put in a few more quantity words to mix things up.

There’s a minor demonstration in a London park.

The demonstrators are protesting against the Conservative Party.

There aren’t many of them.

There are only a handful of protestors and a few policemen watching them.

There are also a number of reporters there. In fact, there are quite a few reporters.

The reporters almost outnumber the protestors.

The reporters are interviewing a couple of the demonstrators and some cameramen are filming the demonstration.

There is also a group of Japanese tourists taking pictures of it.

* Interestingly, 'handful' can be used when counting people. (Even though it is impossible to hold a number of people in your hand).

A random real-world example from google:

"Tonight's BBC Prom concert by the Israel Philharmonic Orchestra was disturbed by a handful of protesters shouting pro-Palestinian slogans."

Tenacious Learner · Answer

Hi melon_soda,

Thank you for your help, time, and extra quantity words!!

Regards

TS

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