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Tenacious Learner Posted 15 years ago
Grammar

Need Correction Please

Hi Teachers,

Could you correct this paragraph that I wrote?

Julia and her boyfriend Cliff went to a film a few days ago. They missed the beginning because they arrived at the cinema about ten minutes late, and they didn’t see the end because the special effects were so bad and a couple of actors acted so badly that they walked out in the middle of it.

Thanks in advance
  

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Hi Well, the paragraph seems ok to me. The bold and underlined words are chosen correctly, and I liked especially your use of adverb and adjective in the sentences. I guess, only the following sentence needs consideration- they didn’t see the end because....

— Natalli.

  • Hi Well, the paragraph seems ok to me.
  • The bold and underlined words are chosen correctly, and I liked especially your use of adverb and adjective in the sentences.
  • I guess, only the following sentence needs consideration- they didn’t see the end because....
  • I think it would be better to use here watch intead of see.
  • g .
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Hi

Well, the paragraph seems ok to me. The bold and underlined words are chosen correctly, and I liked especially your use of adverb and adjective in the sentences.

I guess, only the following sentence needs consideration- they didn’t see the end because.... I think it would be better to use here watch intead of see. E.g. They did not watch the end,
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Hi Natalli, Emotion: smile

Thank you once again for your help.

Natalli. I think it would be better to u
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hahaha..now I need to think. Perhaps am wrong..I need to check. I became doubtful..

hmmm....
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