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Sashline Posted 13 years ago
Grammar
Need better phrasing
Hi guys, can someone help me to phrase the following paragraph :-
"It's dark in here, women are completely covered, though some have taken advantage of the black color of their outfit and made some nice designs on their veils. "
"It's dark in here, women are completely covered, though some have taken advantage of the black color of their outfit and made some nice designs on their veils. "
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The first part of the sentence doesn't seem to be directly related to the rest, so I would separate them. How about this: It's dark in here. The women are completely covered by their black outfits, some of which are decorated with nice designs on the veils.
- The first part of the sentence doesn't seem to be directly related to the rest, so I would separate them.
- How about this: It's dark in here.
- The women are completely covered by their black outfits, some of which are decorated with nice designs on the veils.
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The first part of the sentence doesn't seem to be directly related to the rest, so I would separate them. How about this:
It's dark in here. The women are completely covered by their black outfits, some of which are decorated with nice designs on the veils.
It's dark in here. The women are completely covered by their black outfits, some of which are decorated with nice designs on the veils.
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