Need Assistance In Fixing My Sentence Structure again.
Hi,
I need you assistance fixing my sentence structure again, I don't know, I felt I could improve it but unable to retrieve better notions about it.
"As for his ideal partner, She should be around the age of 20-25 years old only.In terms of looks,she should be slim, fair and good-looking. As for her education, she should be minimum bachelor in finance or science. For the personality traits, she should be tender-hearted and family-oriented. "
Kindly do correct my sentence structure above & if you feel right, do let me know.
Thanks in Advance.
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In terms of looks, space she should be slim, fair and good-looking. As for her education, she should be as a minimum a bachelor in finance or science. For the personality traits, she should be tender-hearted and family-oriented.
- In terms of looks, space she should be slim, fair and good-looking.
- As for her education, she should be as a minimum a bachelor in finance or science.
- For the personality traits, she should be tender-hearted and family-oriented.
- no space " ________________________________________ Some edits are above.
- Also, don't repeat ' as for ', and don't say 'For .
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"As for his ideal partner, she should be around the age of 20-25 years old only space .In terms of looks, space she should be slim, fair and good-looking. As for her education, she should be as a minimum a bachelor in finance or science. For the personality traits, she should be tender-hearted and family-oriented. no space "
0Yes, this is a little awkward and repetitive. Here is how I would word it:
As for his ideal partner, she should be in her early twenties, slim, fair, and attractive. She should be well-educated, with at least a bachelor's degree in finance or science. Finally, she should possess a tender-hearted and family-oriented personality.
Note that I am using a parallel structure (she shou
0Yes, this is a little awkward and repetitive. Here is how I would word it:
As for his ideal partner, she should be in her early twenties, slim, fair, and attractive. She should be well-educated, with at least a bachelor's degree in finance or science. Finally, she should possess a tender-hearted and family-oriented personality.
Note that I am using a parallel structure (she shou
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