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What is your intended major?

Discuss how your interest in the subject developed and describe any experience you have had in the field - such as volunteer work, internships and employment, participation in student organizations and activities - and what you have gained from your involvement. *



Business has always been an uncanny interest of mine. Every since I was young, I have immersed myself in business and have worked towards creating my own companies. As a child I would play shopkeeper with my sister, swindling her imaginary products. If I was not trying to sell my products to my sister, I would be setting up shop on the side of the street selling lemonade to passerbyers. Although business may not have been great, I still got satisfaction from starting my own shop. Attempt after attempt I would try to start a stronger, more equipped company. Endless array of failed business startups as a child were not the only thing that pressed me towards business, but also my father’s own computer business, which he started twenty years ago. I would be working and learning from my father, gained strategies to progress myself with my own company startups. Working at my fathers company, I learned a great deal of information about computer’s, which would help start another company: selling shoes on eBay. With the help of my father, I created an account and started work. They were not just regular Nike shoes however, but ones sold at specific Nike retailers, which I could buy and sell for good profit. Yet, after some bad decisions on which shoe type to buy, my company was once again in a rut.







Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you.
What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud, and how does it relate to the person you are? *



Since I have been three years old, I have been traveling around the world. Venezuela, Germany, France, Italy, Portugal are just some of the countries I have traveled to that have changed my perspective of the world. Traveling abroad, I have experienced a mixture of different cultures and their norms firsthand. Selling all these ways of life has impacted me since childhood. When I was seven years old, first learned how to bargain in Venezuela buying my first wallet. After traveling to more countries, I Saw firsthand how diverse the world really is. Observing countries has taught/shown me that nothing is perfect and everything is subject to change.