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Wrong Hand
One day, Lady Cempluk and Jon Koplo were shopping in a well-known shopping center in Solo. In the clothing store, Cempluk chose an appropriate stuff as a present. Jon Koplo and Lady Cempluk headed to the cashier, after she chose the right stuff. People were queue as no end, like queue to get into the cinema. Cempluk queue up first, while Koplo followed behind. However, since the cashier looked like a new employee, based on his black and white uniform that the intern usually wear, the long queue felt so long. Then Cempluk looked around for another cashier who deserted from the queue. Suddenly her eyes fixed to one of the cashiers who deserted of buyer. "Wow, there is a deserted cashier! Come on, let’s go there, Plo!" Said Cempluk while pulling Koplo s hand who stood behind her. But what happened? "Hey ... Miss, Miss! Where are you going? "Screamed someone that made Cempluk shocked. She turned and more shocked! Oh no! Apparently she pulled a hand of a fat man! After realizing it, apparently Koplo were not standing right behind Cempluk. Instead, there was a fat man standing before him.