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1) They will start stiring up one nation against other,calling them to/for* wars,in order that they would kill each other. [How should I say,*to* or *for ? ]

2) They will be seducing his apprentices and nears*/*neighbours [Nears or neighbours ?]

3)Can I say "Hard destiny" ?If not,what synonym should I use?

4)It split,and in*/*by array,descended to Earth. [In or by ?]

5)Can you say "There are also existed...." ? Or just "Also existed ...."

6)In a sentence,I list some features,and then say,to this type of humans,are specific those features. [Is it right to say that,or how should I say otherwise? ]

Mister Micawber · Accepted Answer

You have problems that you do not recognize.

1) They will start stirring up one nation against another, calling them to war, in order that they should kill each other.

2) They will be seducing his apprentices and neighbours. 'Nears' is not a word.

3) Can I say "Hard destiny"?-- Probably not. If not,what synonym should I use?-- I don't know. What do you intend it to mean?

4) It split and in fragments descended to Earth.

5) There also existed. --You cannot use the others

6) In a sentence,I list some features,and then say,to this type of humans,are specific those features. [Is it right to say that,or how should I say otherwise?-- No, but I need your complete sentence to see what you are trying to do. ]

JF · Answer

Mister Micawber No, but I need your complete sentence to see what you are trying to do.

Unrighteous anger,****,greed,delusion,carnality,cruelty,grumble,vainglory,despondency,attraction,
envy,aversion,libertinism,desire for another's,oppression,malice - these are vices of human children,
humans should avoid these sixteen...

Everyone of them waylays humans,wishing to seize their inside,like a hunter waylays victim...
To boastful,lustful,arrogant,rancorous,unsteady,refusing of giving protection are appropriate these sins,
commited by unlawful people,despite their great danger...

[I've fixed some words,is it right now?]

Mister Micawber · Answer

You must place a blank space after every period, comma, colon, semicolon, exclamation point and question mark.

Unrighteous anger, ****, greed, delusion, carnality, cruelty, complaint, vainglory, despondency, attraction, envy, aversion, libertinism, jealousy, oppression, malice: these are vices of human children. Adults should avoid these sixteen. Every one of them waylays us,wishing to seize our spirits, like a hunter waylays his prey.

~~To boastful,lustful,arrogant,rancorous,unsteady,refusing of giving protection are appropriate these sins, commited by unlawful people,despite their great danger~~ -- This whole phrase is neither a sentence nor makes sense. Please try again.

JF · Answer

Mister MicawberYou must place a blank space after every period, comma, colon, semicolon, exclamation point and question mark.Unrighteous anger, ****, greed, delusion, carnality, cruelty, complaint, vainglory, despondency, attraction, envy, aversion, libertinism, jealousy, oppression, malice: these are vices of human children. Adults should avoid these sixteen. Every one of them waylays us,wishing to seize our spirits, like a hunter waylays his prey. To boastful,lustful,arrogant,rancorous,unsteady,refusing of giving protection are appropriate these sins, commited by unlawful people,despite their great danger -- This whole phrase is neither a sentence nor makes sense. Please try again.

Im just doing a translation of text from russian to english.And Im trying to be as close to the original as it is possible.

And concerning "desire for another's",that means not some person,but something that this person has.So if changing it to something else,then word "envy" would be more suitable.But envy is already used in the sentence.And throughout whole text (and it is really big),"envy" and "desire for another's" are given as different meanings.

And concerning "spirits" instead of "inside".I think I'd better put "nature" there.

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