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Lucas21c Posted 13 years ago
Grammar
Natural sentence structure
Could you tell me whether the following sentence structure is okay or not?
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When local communities build an extensive support system allowing women to keep a balance to hold down jobs and run households at the same time with ease, they can enjoy enough chances to participate in many social activities.
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When local communities build an extensive support system allowing women to keep a balance to hold down jobs and run households at the same time with ease, they can enjoy enough chances to participate in many social activities.
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When the local community has built a support system allowing women to more easily maintain a balance between job and household duties, they can also participate in social activities.
- When the local community has built a support system allowing women to more easily maintain a balance between job and household duties, they can also participate in social activities.
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When the local community has built a support system allowing women to more easily maintain a balance between job and household duties, they can also participate in social activities.
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When local communities build an extensive support system allowing women to keep a balance to hold down jobs and run households at the same time with ease, they can enjoy enough chances to participate in many social activities.
The underlined part is not good.
You need to make it clearer that 'they' does not refer to 'communities'.
What do you mean by 'enoug
The underlined part is not good.
You need to make it clearer that 'they' does not refer to 'communities'.
What do you mean by 'enoug
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