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Lucas21c Posted 13 years ago
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Natural sentence
Could you tell me whether the following sentence sounds fine?
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According to the data announced by the National Statistical Office of South Korea last week, the average income of female workers does not come up to that of male workers, so it is urgent to prepare comprehensive counterplans.
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According to the data announced by the National Statistical Office of South Korea last week, the average income of female workers does not come up to that of male workers, so it is urgent to prepare comprehensive counterplans.
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This is my observation. Grammatically, it is fine. However, I think the choice of words and context can be improved.
- This is my observation.
- Grammatically, it is fine.
- However, I think the choice of words and context can be improved.
- I would personally reword this way: According to the data published by the National Statistical Office of South Korea last week, the average income of female workers does not come up to that of the males' .
- Therefore, it is absolutely urgent to come up with a comprehensive measure to address this issue.
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This is my observation. Grammatically, it is fine. However, I think the choice of words and context can be improved. I would personally reword this way:
According to the data published by the National Statistical Office of South Korea last week, the average income of female workers does not come up to that of the males'. Therefore, it is absolutely urgent to come up with
According to the data published by the National Statistical Office of South Korea last week, the average income of female workers does not come up to that of the males'. Therefore, it is absolutely urgent to come up with
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The sentence is OK, but it is not usual for people to announce data. They announce results of analyzing data.
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