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Kedra Posted 20 years ago
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0I am creating the web copy for the web site of the company, involved in development of the solutions for vertical markets. Below are the first two patagraphs, which will be placed to the start page. I need opinions as per English, style, and confidence the text places, if possible. Will you want to read further, having read the below description? I am ready to get both positive and negative critisizing. 05000Thanks in advance.02br
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01font00What we do02font02br
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01font00We create, maintain, and customize software solutions to facilitate day-to-day real estate and car rental business operations. Focused on your success, not only VeryGoodCompany team works for you, it works with you, helping you to achieve new heights your business deserves. At VeryGoodCompany, we adapt technology to your business needs so that you could realize the value of your investment over time.02font02br
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01font00VeryGoodCompany is a team of highly-qualified professionals, software developers, and QA engineers, specializing in development of automated solutions for vertical markets, in particular for property management industry and car rental service. We provide a broad range of development and support services to people throughout the World. Contact us to discuss your needs so we can start working on your solutions today.02font010id1
  

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0 01blockquote 01cite 10Kedra12cite 10I am creating the web copy for the web site of the company, involved in development of the solutions for vertical markets. Below are the first two patagraphs, which will be placed to the start page. I need opinions as per English, style, and confidence the text places, if possible.

— Philip

  • 0 01blockquote 01cite 10Kedra12cite 10I am creating the web copy for the web site of the company, involved in development of the solutions for vertical markets.
  • Below are the first two patagraphs, which will be placed to the start page.
  • I need opinions as per English, style, and confidence the text places, if possible.
  • Will you want to read further, having read the below description?
  • I am ready to get both positive and negative critisizing.
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01cite10Kedra12cite10I am creating the web copy for the web site of the company, involved in development of the solutions for vertical markets. Below are the first two patagraphs, which will be placed to the start page. I need opinions as per English, style, and confidence the text places, if possible. Will you want to read further, hav
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01font00We create, maintain, and customize software solutions to facilitate day-to-day real estate and car rental business operations. Focused on your success, not only 01u00does02u00 theVeryGoodCompany team work01del00s02del00 for yo
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0Thank you, Philip, I do agree that "please" will be more appropriate in the last sentence. 050010id1
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