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Dear members, I hope some of you would like to check my writing below. It's an introductory part. I've been trying my best, but i still need corrections.Thanks in advance!!Nowadays, most people are too busy working with their jobs and have no time to do the housework, even to clean the floor at home. Vacuum cleaners have already been available for helping people clean the floor easier. However, they still do not solve the problem. In facts people must spare time to vacuum by themselves because of most vacuum cleaners must be driven manually.   To handle this problem, an automatic driver for vacuum cleaner can be one of the solutions. This driver can replace humans navigating a room with a handheld and rechargeable vacuum cleaner on it. The structure of this driver is in form of a mobile robot which can move from one place to another. The mobile robot itself is the integrations between some sensors as the input, a microcontroller as the controller and the actuators as the outputs to run the driver. It is designed to cover the entire floor by certain algorithm, to detect the wall by sensors on the left and right side of the driver, to avoid obstacle by sensors in front and back side of the driver and to avoid falling from stairs.   This automatic driver will benefit not only for people who need efficient of time, but also the old people who are not strong enough to clean a room. By doing this project, an improvement of another robot applications will give advantage for the society.

Julielai · Accepted Answer

Hi,

I believe these robotic vacuum machines are now available for sale. You may want to change your wording to reflect that.

Withpeacel · Answer

Julielai
Hi,

I believe these robotic vacuum machines are now available for sale. You may want to change your wording to reflect that.

yes, you are right. But this is only writing for project purpose.. just dont care about the content.

I still need someone to check that writing please. thank you

Withpeacel · Answer

i need your help please!! to correct the sentences above,..

Julielai · Answer

You need to fix the parts in red. Hope this helps.

WithpeacelDear members, I hope some of you would like to check my writing below. It's an introductory part. I've been trying my best, but i still need corrections.

Thanks in advance!!

Nowadays, most people are too busy working with their jobs and have no time to do the housework, even to clean the floor at home. Vacuum cleaners have already been available to help people clean the floor more easily. However, they still do not solve the problem. In facts people must spare time to vacuum by themselves because of most vacuum cleaners must be driven manually.
To handle this problem, an automatic driver for vacuum cleaner can be one of the solutions. This cleaner can replace humans, navigating a room with a handheld and rechargeable vacuum cleaner on it (rephrase). The cleaner is basically a mobile robot which can move from one place to another. The mobile robot itself is the integrations between some sensors as the input, a microcontroller as the controller and the actuators as the outputs to run the driver(rephrase). It is designed to cover the entire floor by certain algorithm, to detect the wall by sensors on the left and right side of the driver, to avoid obstacle by sensors in front and back side of the driver and to avoid falling from stairs.
This automatic cleaner will benefit not only for people who need efficient of time, but also the old people who are not strong enough to clean a room by themselves. By doing this project, an improvement of another robot applications will give advantage for the society.

Withpeacel · Answer

Thank you very much julielai. It's helpful,..

*** Bless U!!

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