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Withpeacel Posted 19 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

my writing, would you like to check it!

Dear members, I hope some of you would like to check my writing below. It's an introductory part. I've been trying my best, but i still need corrections.

Thanks in advance!!Emotion: big smile

Nowadays, most people are too busy working with their jobs and have no time to do the housework, even to clean the floor at home. Vacuum cleaners have already been available for helping people clean the floor easier. However, they still do not solve the problem. In facts people must spare time to vacuum by themselves because of most vacuum cleaners must be driven manually.
To handle this problem, an automatic driver for vacuum cleaner can be one of the solutions. This driver can replace humans navigating a room with a handheld and rechargeable vacuum cleaner on it. The structure of this driver is in form of a mobile robot which can move from one place to another. The mobile robot itself is the integrations between some sensors as the input, a microcontroller as the controller and the actuators as the outputs to run the driver. It is designed to cover the entire floor by certain algorithm, to detect the wall by sensors on the left and right side of the driver, to avoid obstacle by sensors in front and back side of the driver and to avoid falling from stairs.
This automatic driver will benefit not only for people who need efficient of time, but also the old people who are not strong enough to clean a room. By doing this project, an improvement of another robot applications will give advantage for the society.
  

Top answer

Hi, I believe these robotic vacuum machines are now available for sale. You may want to change your wording to reflect that.

  • Hi, I believe these robotic vacuum machines are now available for sale.
  • You may want to change your wording to reflect that.
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Hi,

I believe these robotic vacuum machines are now available for sale. You may want to change your wording to reflect that.
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Julielai
Hi,

I believe these robotic vacuum machines are now available for sale. You may want to change your wording to reflect that.

yes, you are right. But this is only writing for project purpose.. just dont care about the content.

I still need someone to check that writing please. thank you
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i need your help please!! to correct the sentences above,..
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You need to fix the parts in red. Hope this helps.
WithpeacelDear members, I hope some of you would like to check my writing below. It's an introductory part. I've been trying my best, but i still need corrections.

Thanks in advance!!
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Thank you very much julielai. It's helpful,..

*** Bless U!!

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