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Nguyễn Nhung Posted 7 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

My writing task 1: Overseas visitors to three areas.

The line graph gives information about the number of foreign visitors who came to the coast, the mountains and the lakes in a European country from 1987 to 2007. In general, what stands out from the graph is that while the number of visitors to the coast and the mountains increased, there was a significant growth in that for the lakes which following by a decline in 2007.


In 1987, the figure of foreign visitors to the coast and mountains stood at 40,000 and 20,000 respectively. The number of visitors to the coast then went down slightly in 1992 before it saw a continuous increasing to 75,000 in 2007. That for the mountains had the similar trend to the coast. However, there were more fluctuations in the number of foreign visitors to mountains than that of visitors to the coast. In 2007, the number of visitors to the mountain ended at around 37,000, just two times more than its beginning.


The number of overseas visitors to the lakes started at 10,000 which was the lowest in comparison with the beginning of other areas. After 1987, this number rose dramatically and reach a peak of 75,000 in 2002, same with the figure of visitors to the coast in 2007. Despite this upward trend, the number of foreigners visiting the lakes slumped by 25,000 from 2002 to 2007.

  

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as IELTS TASK 1 Writing band descriptors :

Task achievement:

  • Clear overview
  • covers the requirements of the task

Vocabulary :

  • You shouldn’t write ‘its’ for academic style
  • I think you use a range of vocabulary generally, but you still repeat ‘the number’ and ‘visitor’ a lot

Grammar

  • ‘there was a significant growth in
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The line graph gives information about (Information about ... is very vague. In Task 1, write clearly and precisely.) the number of foreign visitors who came to the coast, the mountain

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